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08/10/2017You have just moved into a new home and are planning to hold a party. You are worried that the noise may disturb your neighbour. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter. 1. Introduce yourself2. Describe your plans for the party3. invite y v.1

08/10/2017You have just moved into a new home and are planning to hold a party. You are worried that the noise may disturb your neighbour. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter. 1. Introduce yourself2. Describe your plans for the party3. invite y v. 1
After students finish their high school they have to make a decision whether they need to work or continue with higher education. Some believe that there are more benefits to carry on their education, I agree with the statement of getting an occupation straight after their high school. To start with, there are some factors that point out if we continue with our higher study there are more opportunities in the future. For example, if you want to be a doctor or lawyer one can not become with a certain university study. It is undeniable that students can have more knowledge and they will be received a certification which can be used for applying for a profession. Therefor, college or high school institution plays a major role. On the other hand, I believe students should get jobs right after high institute graduation. Firstly, they will earn extra cash as well as make them more independent. Secondly, they can gain more experiences in the real world and learn some practical life skills related to what profession they choose. To illustrate, if you were an engineer and you needed to fix a bicycle, you would have a chance to have more fixing experiences than what you learn about it at the institution. Therefore, young people who start to industry after finishing studying at institute may be promoted and become a successful person in their future career. To summarize, higher schooling do provide with high knowledge, but some time make a wrong decision on a career choice but having a industry experience even as a starter or intern will help them to make a choice before starting their career and if they do choice to follow the same teaching as their occupation then they would succeed in their future as they would have allready reallife work experience
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a decision whether they need to work or continue with higher education.
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believe that there are more benefits to carry on their education, I
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with the statement of getting an occupation straight after their
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school.

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with, there are
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factors that point out if we continue with our higher study there are more opportunities in the future.
For example
, if you want to be a doctor or lawyer one can not become with a certain university study. It is undeniable that students can have more
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knowledge and
they will
be received
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used
for applying for a profession. Therefor, college or
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school institution plays a major role.

On the other hand
, I believe students should
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get
jobs right after
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institute graduation.
Firstly
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as
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them more independent.
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, they can gain more
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experiences
in the real world and learn
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some
practical life
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skills
related to what profession they choose. To illustrate, if you were an engineer and you needed to
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fix
a bicycle, you would have a chance to have more fixing
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experiences
than what you learn about it at the institution.
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, young
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people
who
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to industry after finishing studying at institute may
be promoted
and become a successful person in their future career.

To summarize
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knowledge,
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time
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a
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wrong
decision on a career choice
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but
having
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industry
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experience
even as a starter or intern will
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them to
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a choice
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starting their career and if they do choice to follow the same teaching as their occupation then they would succeed in their future as they would have
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IELTS essay 08/10/2017You have just moved into a new home and are planning to hold a party. You are worried that the noise may disturb your neighbour. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter. 1. Introduce yourself2. Describe your plans for the party3. invite y v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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