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Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information is relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.32

Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information is relevant and useful. Others disagree. v. 32
Nowadays it is frequently requested to give sensitive data to apply for jobs. Furthermore, companies want to know their applicant's interests, marital status and even their personal favourite activities. There are some that may find it irrelevant and useless, though some others would agree otherwise. In this essay, I will argue how personal information should remain out of the hiring decision. It is becoming increasingly important to match people's profiles to the company's culture. Moreover, human resources staff can easily screen candidates using sophisticated software, the candidate's data start to play an important role in this analysis. In this case, personal information needs to be handled and processed independently from the candidate's skills and job requirements. For instance, a company needs to expand aggressively in very remote areas, it can be more useful to filter out candidates that express little interest in travelling. People will easily agree to provide personal data given the chance to participate in a hiring process. This does not automatically allow companies to make decisions without a proper assessment of the applicant. Take for example someone that is applying for a job as a truck driver, what influence does being married or liking to cook in knowing how to drive? Thus, personal facts about the aspirant do not tell the company, whether to hire the person or not. In conclusion, usually companies request personal information on applications to assess the candidate's fit with the job requirements. In my opinion, personal data must be handled with extreme privacy as well as it should not be part of the final hiring decision, because people should be treated the same regardless of their personal preferences. We are all equal under the protection of democracy and law. Therefore, it should be obligated by law that employers disclose their personal data handling policy to everyone involved in hiring processes.
Nowadays it is
frequently
requested to give sensitive
data
to apply for
jobs
.
Furthermore
,
companies
want to know their applicant's interests, marital status and even their
personal
favourite
activities. There are
some
that may find it irrelevant and useless, though
some
others would
agree
otherwise
. In this essay, I will argue how
personal
information should remain out of the
hiring
decision.

It is becoming
increasingly
important
to match
people
's profiles to the
company
's culture.
Moreover
, human resources staff can
easily
screen candidates using sophisticated software, the candidate's
data
start
to play an
important
role in this analysis.
In this case
,
personal
information needs to
be handled
and processed
independently from
the candidate's
skills
and
job
requirements.
For instance
, a
company
needs to expand
aggressively
in
very
remote areas, it can be more useful to filter out candidates that express
little
interest in travelling.

People
will
easily
agree
to provide
personal
data
given
the chance to participate in a
hiring
process. This does not
automatically
allow
companies
to
make
decisions without a proper assessment of the applicant. Take
for example
someone
that is
applying for a
job
as a truck driver, what influence does
being married
or liking to cook in knowing how to drive?
Thus
,
personal
facts about the aspirant do not
tell
the
company
, whether to hire the person or not.

In conclusion
,
usually
companies
request
personal
information on applications to assess the candidate's fit with the
job
requirements. In my opinion,
personal
data
must
be handled
with extreme privacy
as well
as it should not be part of the final
hiring
decision,
because
people
should
be treated
the same regardless of their
personal
preferences. We are all equal under the protection of democracy and law.
Therefore
, it should
be obligated
by law that employers disclose their
personal
data
handling policy to everyone involved in
hiring
processes.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information is relevant and useful. Others disagree. v. 32

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
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