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Elderly men and its contribution to society

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Society is integrated with people from all ages, likes, dislikes, professions, attributions, and many other characteristics that allow us to live within a peaceful and sane environment. Elderly men are often neglected, them as a whole and also their abilities, but there are several parts that integrate their life that we have not consider. They have lived and worked for and in society, therefore they are a vital part of the life as we know it. Often, as time passes by, we tend to set apart people for it abilities and their work, and by doing this, the elderly get excluded. But, we must start to think that their part in this world and in the present has not ended; we should be offering more opportunities regarding their wise knowledge on life experiences, failures and abilities.
Society
is integrated
with
people
from all ages, likes, dislikes, professions, attributions, and
many
other characteristics that
allow
us to
live
within a peaceful and sane environment.

Elderly
men
are
often
neglected, them as a whole and
also
their abilities,
but
there are several parts that integrate their life that we have not
consider
. They have
lived
and worked for and in society,
therefore
they are a vital part of the life as we know it.

Often
, as time passes by, we tend to set apart
people
for it abilities and their work, and by doing this, the elderly
get
excluded.
But
, we
must
start
to
think
that their part in this world and in the present has not ended; we should be offering more opportunities regarding their wise knowledge on life experiences, failures and abilities.
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IELTS essay Elderly men and its contribution to society

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
136 words
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