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Education is one of the most fundamental part in a person’s life

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Education is one of the most fundamental part in a person’s life. However, the methods to teach students nowadays are not suitable. Many pupils say that lessons they learn at school are quite hard and impossible to concentrate. This essay will explain some causes and give some approaches to solve this problem. There are some reason for this matter. Firstly, lessons which students learn at school are not interesting. It’s because teachers are not active and amenity in their lecture, which will cause the same affect to their student. Secondly, with the growth of technology, this is the main reason for the problem mentioned above. As each student owns a electrical device such as smart phone or tablet, they will spend hours to playing games or chatting with others, even in classroom. This will cause lack of knowledge and distract from lessons. To deal with this problem, both parents and teachers must change their attitude toward their children. First of all, teachers must create a fascinating atmosphere in their lessons. To do this, teachers should get to know their students. After that, they can choose different methods of teaching which students like. At a result, students will automatically attention to the lecture and improve their knowledge. Secondly, parents should educate their children that smartphones are not allow in classroom and limit the time they use it. School should cooperate with parents to improve the success of this approach. To sum up, distraction and lack of concentration is not coincidence. Students must self conscious as well as teachers must understand their pupils more to improve classroom’s effectiveness.
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in a person’s life.
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and impossible to concentrate. This essay will
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causes and give
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approaches to solve this problem.

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reason for this matter.
Firstly
, lessons which
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students
learn at school are not interesting. It’s
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because
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teachers
are not active and amenity in their lecture, which will cause the same
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to their
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student
.
Secondly
, with the growth of technology, this is the main reason for the problem mentioned above. As each
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student
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electrical device such as smart phone or tablet, they will spend hours to playing games or chatting with others, even in classroom. This will cause lack of knowledge and distract from lessons.

To deal with this problem, both parents and
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teachers
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their attitude toward their children.
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teachers
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create a fascinating atmosphere in their lessons. To do this,
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get
to know their
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students
. After that, they can choose
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different
methods of teaching which
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students
like. At a result,
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students
will
automatically
attention to the lecture and
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improve
their knowledge.
Secondly
, parents should educate their children that smartphones are not
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in classroom and limit the time they
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use
it. School should cooperate with parents to
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improve
the success of this approach.

To sum up, distraction and lack of concentration is not coincidence.
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Students
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must
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self conscious
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teachers
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understand their pupils more to
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improve
classroom’s effectiveness.
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IELTS essay Education is one of the most fundamental part in a person’s life

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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