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Economic progress is a way to measure the success of a Country while some people say other factors are aslo have importance.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Economic progress is a way to measure the success of a Country while some people say other factors are aslo have importance. PRODX
These days, more and more human beings believe that economic growth is a route to weigh the success of a nation whereas a number of people believe that others factors are more pivotal. In this essay I will illustrate both sides of the argument and will explain why the former opinion is better. In general, there are a wide variety of reasons why public hold the claim if a country’s economic stability is good then it will be called success country. Perhaps the preliminary reason is that in present era people give more preference to those nations which has no issues with money, and has vast amount of capital. To be more exact, public choose those countries for their future destination who are economically stable since there will be no problem of salary as well as they will get the medical treatment free of cost. For example, in a recent survey it has been observed that every year around 60% of Indian residents move to Canada which is due to the fact that Canada’s economic stability is way more strong compare to India. On the other hand, a chunk of people believe that factors like political as well as social progress are more pivotal. Firstly, a country needs to be politically strong to solve the problems of their residents. A good illustration of this is that in Bangladesh it has become a ubiquitous scenario to see residents do not trust their political leaders since those power holders do not anything for their mother land like they do not ameliorate road conditions, hospitals amenities, and so on. Furthermore, social factor is also prominent. To be more precise, if the residents of a country do not socialise with foreign visitors in an appropriate way then those tourists will lose their interest, as a result they may not go to that place again in the future. To conclude, this is a topic which is relevant to modern society. However, in my opinion I think economic progress is slightly more vital compare to other factors to measure success of a nation, thus government should focus on that sector properly.
These days, more and more human beings believe that
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economic
growth is a route to weigh the success of a nation whereas a number of
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people
believe that others
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factors
are more pivotal. In this essay I will illustrate both sides of the argument and will
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explain
why the former opinion is better.

In general
, there are a wide variety of reasons why public hold the claim if a
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country’s
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economic
stability is
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good
then it will
be called
success
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country
. Perhaps the preliminary reason is that in present era
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people
give more preference to those nations which has no issues with money, and has vast amount of capital. To be more exact, public choose those
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countries
for their future destination who are
economically
stable since there will be no problem of salary
as well
as they will
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get
the medical treatment free of cost.
For example
, in a recent survey it has
been observed
that every year around 60% of Indian
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residents
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move
to Canada which is due to the fact that Canada’s
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economic
stability is way more strong compare to India.

On the other hand
, a chunk of
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people
believe that
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factors
like political
as well
as social progress are more pivotal.
Firstly
, a
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country
needs to be
politically
strong to solve the problems of their
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residents
. A
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good
illustration of this is that in Bangladesh it has become a ubiquitous scenario to
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see
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residents
do not trust their political leaders since those power holders do not anything for their mother land like they do not ameliorate road conditions, hospitals amenities, and
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so
on.
Furthermore
, social
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factor
is
also
prominent. To be more precise, if the
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residents
of a
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country
do not
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socialise
with foreign visitors
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in an appropriate way
then those tourists will lose their interest,
as a result
they may not go to that place again in the future.

To conclude
, this is a topic which is relevant to modern society.
However
, in my opinion I
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think
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economic
progress is
slightly
more vital compare to other
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factors
to measure success of a nation,
thus
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government
should focus on that sector
properly
.
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IELTS essay Economic progress is a way to measure the success of a Country while some people say other factors are aslo have importance.

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