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Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity?

Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity? 3K1w
Crime is an issue of increasing concern around the world, and more money than ever before is being spent on the detection and punishment of criminal activity. The reasons why people commit crime are countless, but drugs and alcohol, social problems and poverty play a major role. To solve these problems, governments can either focus on draconian punishments, or improve employment opportunities, invest in good housing projects, and tackle drug and alcohol abuse. One of the main causes of criminality is the use, sale, and trafficking of narcotics. For example, the sale of drugs is organized by armed criminal gangs who illegally traffic drugs and control their business with extreme violence. Drug-related crime does not end there; drug users often steal to fund their habit, resulting in further acts of petty crime. The social problems connected with crime are said to be the result of single-parent families, absent role models and bad living conditions. The children from these broken families often become criminals because they feel alienated from society. Poverty is also a reason behind crime. When unskilled jobs pay so little and prices are so high, it is easy to see why some turn to crime for an income. Crime can, of course, be dealt with by toughening criminal laws and introducing longer custodial sentences for persistent criminals, but some of the best ways to deal with crime may be to deal with the social causes. Increasing employment opportunities in poorer areas would improve living standards, which would mean access to affordable housing and education. Government funding for drug and alcohol rehabilitation programmes would help reduce dependency on stimulants and the need for criminal activity that surrounds them. In conclusion, crime is a major issue, but cracking down on offenders with harsh penal system is not the only way. These problems can be solved through the government providing jobs and funding which should raise living standards and dramatically reduce crime levels.
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is an issue of increasing concern around the world, and more money than ever
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before
is
being spent
on the detection and punishment of
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criminal
activity. The reasons why
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people
commit
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crime
are countless,
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but
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drugs
and alcohol, social
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problems
and poverty play a major role. To solve these
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problems
,
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governments
can either focus on
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draconian
punishments, or
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improve
employment opportunities, invest in
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good
housing projects, and tackle
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drug
and alcohol abuse.

One of the main causes of criminality is the
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use
, sale, and trafficking of narcotics.
For example
, the sale of
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drugs
is organized
by armed
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criminal
gangs who
illegally
traffic
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drugs
and control their business with extreme violence. Drug-related
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crime
does not
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end
there;
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drug
users
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steal to fund their habit, resulting in
further
acts of petty
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crime
. The social
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problems
connected with
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crime
are said
to be the result of single-parent families, absent role models and
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bad
living conditions. The children from these broken families
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often
become
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criminals
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because
they feel alienated from society. Poverty is
also
a reason behind
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crime
. When unskilled jobs pay
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so
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little
and prices are
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so
high, it is easy to
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see
why
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some
turn to
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crime
for an income.

Crime can,
of course
,
be dealt
with by toughening
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criminal
laws and introducing longer custodial sentences for persistent
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criminals
,
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but
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some
of the best ways to deal with
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crime
may be to deal with the social causes. Increasing employment opportunities in poorer areas would
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improve
living standards, which would mean access to affordable housing and education.
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Government
funding for
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drug
and alcohol rehabilitation
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programmes
would
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help
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reduce
dependency on stimulants and the need for
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criminal
activity that surrounds them.

In conclusion
,
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crime
is a major issue,
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but
cracking down on offenders with harsh penal system is not the
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only
way. These
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problems
can
be solved
through the
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government
providing jobs and funding which should raise living standards and
dramatically
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reduce
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crime
levels.
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IELTS essay Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity?

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322 words
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