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Duty of parents or teachers

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Nowadays, health problems mostly obesty is increasing at mushscoming vote Some individuals opine that it is the responsibility of school to telling about balanced diet habits and advantages of it to children while your opine that it is the obligation for parents to teach all about food. This essay will examine both views and also present my personal opinion. First and foremost, many observers give the explanation that lots of kids get the diseases due to the ignorance of this parents. In fact, 70% of modern parents spend their most of the time on their Jobs. For up bringing of the children, they have remain least hours. Moreover some parents do not know what their kids eat. At smaller age, infants are not much aware and mature to make accurate choice towards food iteam. As every body know parents are the first tutor of their children. Therefore, it is the duty of parents to set an example in the front of their kids. For this purpose, they should adopt the eating habits of nutrientsful diet. By this kids will automatically learn which thing they have to eat. Because it is seen that childre are follow the footpath of their mom-dad. Now look to contrary view, which contend that teacher should teach all about choice of good foods. However kids eat the meal mostly at home but they spend more time period at school. Sometime illiterate parents are not able to understand the children habits and they cannot make any decision regarding kids thinking toward meal. Meanwhile, teachers are more important person and become the advisor to kids. Just as advisor, they can give all the necessary information about different kinds of food in accurate and effective manners. If pupils are far from diseases and consume food which contain all main facts for their growth then they can focus on the study more time. So Schools should also keep attention toward each and every student's physical appearance. In addition to it, they should give extra classes to learners about these topics and also add curriculum that can help to avoid major disease among children. After analysing both view, I think mostly educated parents should give some time for kid and it is their duty to make habitual their kids for eating balanced food. Along with parents, teachers Should always learn to pupil time to time.
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mostly
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individuals opine that it is the responsibility of school to telling about balanced diet habits and advantages of it to
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children
while your opine that it is the obligation for
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parents
to teach all about
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food
. This essay will examine both views and
also
present my personal opinion.

First
and foremost,
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many
observers give the explanation that lots of
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kids
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get
the diseases due to the ignorance of
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this
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parents
. In fact, 70% of modern
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parents
spend their most of the
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time
on their Jobs. For up bringing of the
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children
, they have
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remain
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some
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parents
do not know what their
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kids
eat. At smaller age, infants are not much aware and mature to
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make
accurate choice towards
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food
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iteam
.
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As
every body know
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parents
are the
first
tutor of their
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children
.
Therefore
, it is the duty of
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parents
to set an example in the front of their
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kids
. For this purpose, they should adopt the eating habits of
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nutrientsful
diet. By
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this
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kids
will
automatically
learn which thing they
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have to
eat.
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it is
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seen
that
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childre
are follow the footpath of their mom-dad.
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Now
look to contrary view, which contend that teacher should teach all about choice of
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good
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foods
.
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However
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kids
eat the meal
mostly
at home
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but
they spend more
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time
period at school. Sometime illiterate
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parents
are not able to understand the
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children
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habits and
they cannot
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make
any decision regarding
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kids
thinking toward meal. Meanwhile, teachers are more
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important
person and become the advisor to
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kids
.
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as advisor, they can give all the necessary information about
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different
kinds of
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food
in accurate and effective manners. If pupils are far from diseases and consume
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food
which contain all main facts for their growth then they can focus on the study more
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time
.
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So
Schools should
also
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keep
attention toward each and every student's physical appearance.
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to it, they should give extra classes to learners about these topics and
also
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add
curriculum that can
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help
to avoid major disease among
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children
. After
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analysing
both view, I
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think


mostly
educated
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parents
should give

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time
for
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and it is their duty

to
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make
habitual their
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kids
for eating

balanced
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food
. Along with
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parents
, teachers Should always learn to pupil
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to
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time
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IELTS essay Duty of parents or teachers

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
394 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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