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Due to dramatic change on our daily life communication.

Due to dramatic change on our daily life communication. MBxn6
Due to dramatic change on our daily life communication. People are in urge to learn more than one language. As a result of that we should begin to teach our young learner multi-languages at primary school. Educational expertise strongly believe that benefits outweigh the drawbacks in learning foreign languages in early stages. In this essay I will firmly highlight the strengths and weaknesses for teaching students in primary schools rather than high school. On the one hand, pupils can study more than one language faster than adults. Hence, they don't face the same difficulties to memorize. For example, child whose parents encourage him to learn English in addition to his first language, his language abilities is higher than his fellows who are talking their mother tongue only. furthermore, he can understand different dialects easily and he is ready to be introduced to third language. Recent psychological studies proven that children in primary school can gain up to 4 languages in the same time and reflect the same productivity. Moreover, level of confidence in young children is higher as they will communicate with different nations. In parallel, The secondary school students don't give the same attention to learning foreign languages. Their main focus only to their interest in study. For instance, if they wish to study in medical fields they will pay more attention to Biology and Chemistry. Hence, They will face problem to learn even the basics for this language. Another critical issue the pupil will be affected by their mother language, He can't hear or pronounce the second language clearly. All in all, to meet the new Life factors in our daily routine we should emphasize to encourage our children to learn many languages. Accordingly early teaching foreign languages to some extent will have great impact in child personality and broaden his minds.
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on our daily life communication.
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are in urge to
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learn
more than one
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language
.
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a result of that we should
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begin
to teach our young learner multi-languages at primary
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school
. Educational expertise
strongly
believe that benefits outweigh the drawbacks in learning foreign
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languages
in early stages. In this essay I will
firmly
highlight the strengths and weaknesses for teaching students in primary
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schools
rather
than high school.

On the one hand, pupils can
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study
more than one
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language
faster than adults.
Hence
, they don't face the same difficulties to memorize.
For example
, child whose parents encourage him to
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learn
English
in addition
to his
first
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language
, his
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language
abilities is higher than his fellows who are talking their mother tongue
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only
.
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furthermore
, he can understand
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different
dialects
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easily and
he is ready to
be introduced
to third
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language
. Recent psychological
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studies
proven that children in primary
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school
can gain up to 4
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languages
in the same time and reflect the same productivity.
Moreover
, level of confidence in young children is higher
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as
they will communicate with
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different
nations.

In parallel, The secondary
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school
students don't give the same attention to learning foreign
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languages
. Their main focus
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only
to their interest in
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study
.
For instance
, if they wish to
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study
in medical fields they will pay more attention to Biology and Chemistry.
Hence
, They will face problem to
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learn
even the basics for this
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language
. Another critical issue the pupil will be
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affected
by their mother
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language
, He can't hear or pronounce the second
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language
clearly
.

All in all, to
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meet
the new Life factors in our daily routine we should emphasize to encourage our children to
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learn
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many
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languages
.
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Accordingly
early teaching foreign
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languages
to
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some
extent will have great impact in child personality and broaden his minds.
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IELTS essay Due to dramatic change on our daily life communication.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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