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Both passages, Reading and writing discuss about the productivity and rewards in a labor contract. Reading passage points, first, that the rewards given by companies to their employees are well justified because they improve the productivity of them. It also improves the behavior of employees at work. Second, the Reading points that book’s proves all this theory. In addition, it’s proved that people need external forces that motivates them, so they can achieve their results better. Finally, the text points that this rewarding system brings results, but only if the rewards structure is well planned. On the other hand, listening passage differ from the text because several reasons. First, rewards are not directly related with the productivity, in fact the lecturer said that people did not like it, and in some times, workers reduce their productivity. Second, people relates these rewards with a kind of punished work because they feel controlled by their employers, like if were manipulated by them. Third, the lecturer said that rewards are also complicate in a way that people sometimes don’t get the expected rewards, and that can make them feel a little bit disappointed. Finally, lecturer think that the relationship between employees and their bosses may be damaged. To sum up, this is how the listening passage causes doubts on the point made by the reading passage.
Both passages, Reading and writing
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discuss about the
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productivity
and
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rewards
in a labor contract.

Reading
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passage
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points
,
first
, that the
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rewards
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given
by
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companies
to their employees are well justified
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because
they
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improve
the
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productivity
of them. It
also
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improves
the behavior of employees at work. Second, the Reading
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points
that book’s proves all this theory.
In addition
, it’s proved that
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people
need external forces that motivates them,
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so
they can achieve their results better.
Finally
, the text
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points
that this rewarding system brings results,
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but
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only
if the
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rewards
structure is well planned.

On the other hand
, listening
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passage
differ from the text
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because
several reasons.
First
,
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rewards
are not
directly
related with the
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productivity
, in fact the lecturer said that
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people
did not like it, and in
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some
times, workers
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reduce
their
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productivity
. Second,
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people
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relates
these
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rewards
with a kind of punished work
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because
they feel controlled by their employers, like if
were manipulated
by them. Third, the lecturer said that
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rewards
are
also
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complicate
in a way that
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people
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sometimes
don’t
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get
the
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expected
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rewards
, and that can
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make
them feel a
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little bit
disappointed.
Finally
, lecturer
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think
that the relationship between employees and their bosses may
be damaged
.

To sum up, this is how the listening
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passage
causes doubts on the
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point
made by the reading
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passage
.
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IELTS essay discuss about the productivity and rewards in a labor contract.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
223 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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