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Do you think that physical activities should be introduced to school children on regular basis? Explain. What kind of sports are the most useful?

Do you think that physical activities should be introduced to school children on regular basis? Explain. What kind of sports are the most useful? dOYK
The importance of physical activities in schools which is always debatable has now become more controversial with many people claiming that it is beneficial. In my opinion, sports are essential to start in schools on regular intervals. This essay will highlight the importance of sports activities for school going children and then it will concentrate on other different types of sports that are necessary for learners, thus leads to logical conclusion. Analysing the statement and explaining further, the first and foremost reason of introducing sports activities in schools are they help the students to become physically fit and it increases the strength of students as well. To examlify, by doing regular sports such as racing will aid to strengthen the stamina of a child and make her strong. Another striking benifit of this trend is that if one can do these kinds of games from school then he will be able to get opportunity to become a member of sport matches which are held nationally as well as internationally. These are the reasons that why many are in favour of this trend.
The importance of physical activities in
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people
claiming that it is beneficial. In my opinion,
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sports
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start
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schools
on regular intervals. This essay will highlight the importance of
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sports
activities for
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school
going children and then it will concentrate on other
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different
types of
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sports
that are necessary for learners,
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leads to logical conclusion.
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Analysing
the statement and explaining
further
, the
first
and foremost reason of introducing
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sports
activities in
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schools
are they
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help
the students to become
physically
fit and it increases the strength of students
as well
. To
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examlify
, by doing regular
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sports
such as racing will aid to strengthen the stamina of a child and
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make
her strong. Another striking
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benifit
of this trend is that if one can do these kinds of games from
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school
then he will be able to
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get
opportunity to become a member of
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sport
matches which
are held
nationally
as well
as
internationally
. These are the reasons that why
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many
are in
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IELTS essay Do you think that physical activities should be introduced to school children on regular basis? Explain. What kind of sports are the most useful?

Essay
  American English
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182 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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