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do you think bringing up children is a job for women

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In this day and age and in many parts of the world men and women are seen as equals. However, it is usually said that bringing up children is mostly “a woman's job". This school of thought exists due to the fact that gender roles were of importance up until recent years. And while others take a different view, this is still an essential matter of discussion because children are the future of a nation. A healthy and proper upbringing is crucial. This essay will discuss both views and will decide whether or not a child needs both parents when being raised. An upside of women taking on the bigger part in raising a child is that women have the ability to be more caring. Women, in general have been taught since a young age that they should be kind and thoughtful. Such traits will help a mom understand their child's feelings and actions. It is easier for a mother to comprehend her child's emotions. Another pro is that children have a tendency of feeling more comfortable with their birth mothers. This is primarily due to the fact that after birth, a hormone called “oxytocin” is released. This hormone is responsible for creating a stronger bond between the new-born and the mother. Therefore, mothers are the ones who usually read a book for their child or sing a special song before putting them to bed. It is a bond that lasts for life (Cornell, 2020). While there are certainly many advantages to giving a mother the bigger part in raising children, a father's involvement in upbringing has a positive effect on the development of the child. When a father is involved emotionally as well as economically, a positive atmosphere is created in the household. Both parents are in essential in order to manage the child's emotional state and in order to prevent negative emotions such as anxiety, depression, and fear of abandonment. Another reason why fathers are needed just as much as mothers, is that a good relationship between the father and their child enhances and nurtures the child's potential. A child is much more likely to grow up confident and independent with the support of both parents together (Basil, 2019). Therefore, both parents should be involved and a father's role is just as important, if not more. Having both parents involved will not only raise a healthy child, but will also create a positive environment at home and will nurture the potential and skills of the child. Despite many research that proves the mother's importance. No research disproves the importance of a father's role in upbringing. In fact, most scientific research suggests that both parents are equally needed for a positive and a healthy development. Children are indeed the future and raising healthy children will create a better generation.
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men
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seen
as equals.
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usually
said that bringing up
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children
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mostly
“a woman's job
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. This school of
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thought
exists due to the fact that gender roles were of importance up until recent years. And while others take a
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different
view, this is
still
an essential matter of discussion
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because
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children
are the future of a nation. A
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healthy
and proper upbringing is crucial. This essay will discuss both views and will decide
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whether or not
a
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child
needs both
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parents
when
being raised
. An upside of
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women
taking on the bigger part in raising a
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child
is that
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women
have the ability to be more caring.
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Women
,
in general
have
been taught
since a young age that they should be kind and thoughtful. Such traits will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
a mom understand their
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child's
feelings and actions. It is easier for a
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mother
to comprehend her
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child's
emotions. Another pro is that
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children
have a tendency of feeling more comfortable with their birth mothers. This is
primarily
due to the fact that after birth, a hormone called “oxytocin”
is released
. This hormone is responsible for creating a stronger bond between the new-born and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mother
.
Therefore
, mothers are the ones who
usually
read a book for their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
child
or sing a special song
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before
putting them to bed. It is a bond that lasts for life (Cornell, 2020). While there are
certainly
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many
advantages to giving a
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mother
the bigger part in raising
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children
, a father's involvement in upbringing has a
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positive
effect on the development of the
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child
. When a father
is involved
emotionally
as well
as
economically
, a
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positive
atmosphere
is created
in the household. Both
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parents
are in essential in order to manage the
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child's
emotional state and in order to
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prevent
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negative
emotions such as anxiety, depression, and fear of abandonment. Another reason why fathers
are needed
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just
as much as mothers, is that a
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good
relationship between the father and their
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child
enhances and nurtures the
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child's
potential. A
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child
is much more likely to grow up confident and independent with the support of both
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parents
together (Basil, 2019).
Therefore
, both
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parents
should
be involved
and a father's role is
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just
as
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important
, if not more. Having both
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involved will not
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raise a
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healthy
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child
,
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will
also
create a
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positive
environment at home and will nurture the potential and
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skills
of the
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child
. Despite
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many research
that proves the mother's importance. No research disproves the importance of a father's role in upbringing. In fact, most scientific research suggests that both
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parents
are
equally
needed for a
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positive
and a
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healthy
development.
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Children
are
indeed
the future and raising
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healthy
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children
will create a better generation.
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IELTS essay do you think bringing up children is a job for women

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