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Do you agree with the following statement? Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people. v.4

Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people. v. 4
Serious crimes have become increasingly popular. There are some people who view that criminals who commit dangerous crimes should be penalized by imposing a death term, while there are others who think that alternate measures should be considered. However, this essay believes that the latter cannot be taken into consideration as it can lead to potential risks in society. This essay will discuss both points of view with possible examples followed by a reasoned conclusion. On the one hand, some people believe that the death penalty is a crucial punishment for people who commit dangerous crimes. This is because it can create terror among the public and it has the potential to make a person think twice before committing a crime again. In other words, this fear can eradicate future crimes from occurring. In my opinion, I believe that this is the right way to penalize them for their cruel acts. For example, The Times has recently reported that there has been a substantial 43% decrease in murder rate when the UK government had imposed strict punishments such as encounter against people who committed murders. On the other hand, there are others who think that there should be some alternate measures taken into consideration before imposing a death penalty directly. These people believe that there should be strict interrogations with the culprit and this way the government would be able to understand the root cause of these crimes. Another measure would be educating him about the benefits this society has to offer for individuals who do not commit any crimes. As a result, the government would be having enough data to understand the reason for these crimes and can stop them from occurring in the future and also transforming their lives. However, it is highly unlikely that the chance of a criminal transforming into a good person again is very minimal. This could also lead to some serious risks in society if the criminal continues to behave in a dangerous way. In conclusion, despite varied views, in my opinion, I believe that imposing a death penalty for criminals who commit dangerous crimes in order to minimize potential risks in the future is the key to minimize the crime rate. It is recommended that more and more governments across the world should implement this for a better society.
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people
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who
view that
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criminals
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who
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commit
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dangerous
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crimes
should
be penalized
by imposing a death term, while there are others
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who
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think
that alternate measures should
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.
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that the latter cannot
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into consideration as it can lead to potential
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risks
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society
. This essay will discuss both points of view with possible examples followed by a reasoned conclusion.

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some
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people
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believe
that the death penalty is a crucial punishment for
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people
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who
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commit
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dangerous
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crimes
. This is
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because
it can create terror among the public and it has the potential to
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make
a person
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think
twice
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before
committing a
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crime
again. In
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other
words, this fear can eradicate future
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crimes
from occurring. In my opinion, I
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believe
that this is the right way to penalize them for their cruel acts.
For example
, The Times has recently reported that there has been a substantial 43% decrease in murder rate when the UK
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government
had imposed strict punishments such as encounter against
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people
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who
committed murders.

On the
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hand, there are others
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who
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think
that there should be
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some
alternate measures taken into consideration
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before
imposing a death penalty
directly
. These
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people
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believe
that there should be strict interrogations with the culprit and this way the
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government
would be able to understand the root cause of these
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crimes
. Another measure would be educating him about the benefits this
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society
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has to
offer for individuals
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who
do not
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commit
any
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crimes
.
As a result
, the
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government
would be having
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enough
data to understand the reason for these
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crimes
and can
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stop
them from occurring in the future and
also
transforming their
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lives
.
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highly
unlikely that the chance of a
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criminal
transforming into a
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good
person again is
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minimal. This could
also
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serious
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in
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society
if the
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criminal
continues to behave in a
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dangerous
way.

In conclusion
, despite varied views, in my opinion, I
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believe
that imposing a death penalty for
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criminals
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who
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commit
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dangerous
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crimes
in order to minimize potential
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risks
in the future is the key to minimize the
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crime
rate. It
is recommended
that more and more
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governments
across the world should implement this for a better
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society
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
387 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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