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Do you agree or disagree with the statement: Internet is as important as other service such as building roads that government should make Internet access to all the citizens at no cost. v.2

: Internet is as important as other service such as building roads that government should make Internet access to all the citizens at no cost. v. 2
The internet is an irremovable part of modern people’s life, and the cost of internet access also a concerned topic of all citizens. However, not likely public roads, in my opinion, the government should not allow free access to the internet. On the one hand, the charge of internet access is an important income of government. For most citizens, they would not spend a lot of money on the network, maybe just hundred dollars per year, but the sum of all the expenses from every citizen is huge revenue, which can help the government makes many different for their people. For instance, the government can use this revenue to invest some hospitals and medical institutes to preserve citizens’ health or to establish primary schools of left-behind children or poverty families’ children. The people in the country could achieve better public welfare, even if they are required to pay for their internet access costs. On the other hand, not everyone wants to let internet access be free. Many parents and teachers disagree with the idea, because if the charge of internet access is canceled, their children or students will spend more time on the network yet study. There is no denying that compared with adults, many children do not do well in self-control. However, the most important job as a student is to study. If the Internet becomes free for everyone, the restrictions on children' s access to it are further reduced. They will be able to play games and watch videos on the Internet with less stress than they used to be, because they don’t have to worry about the cost. More time on the internet means less time to study. None of the citizen wants to see this, considering the future of us. All in all, the government should still let the citizens pay for their own bill of internet access in the future.
The internet is an irremovable part of modern
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people
’s life, and the cost of internet
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access
also
a concerned topic of all
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citizens
.
However
, not likely public roads, in my opinion, the
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government
should not
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allow
free
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access
to the internet.

On the one hand, the charge of internet
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access
is an
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important
income of
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government
. For most
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citizens
, they would not spend
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a lot of
money on the network, maybe
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just
hundred dollars per year,
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but
the sum of all the expenses from every
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citizen
is huge revenue, which can
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help
the
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government
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makes
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many
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different
for their
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people
.
For instance
, the
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government
can
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use
this revenue to invest
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some
hospitals and medical institutes to preserve
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citizens’
health or to establish primary schools of
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left
-behind
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children
or poverty families’
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children
. The
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people
in the country could achieve better public welfare, even if they
are required
to pay for their internet
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access
costs.

On the other hand
, not everyone wants to
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let
internet
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access
be free.
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Many
parents and teachers disagree with the
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idea
,
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because
if the charge of internet
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access
is canceled
, their
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children
or students will spend more time on the network
yet
study. There is no denying that compared with adults,
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many
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children
do not do well in self-control.
However
, the most
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important
job as a student is to study. If the Internet becomes free for everyone, the restrictions on
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children&
#039; s
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access
to it are
further
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reduced
. They will be able to play games and
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watch
videos on the Internet with less
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stress
than they
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used
to be,
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because
they don’t
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have to
worry about the cost. More time on the internet means less time to study. None of the
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citizen
wants to
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see
this, considering the future of us.

All in all, the
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government
should
still
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let
the
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citizens
pay for their
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own
bill of internet
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
access
in the future.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay : Internet is as important as other service such as building roads that government should make Internet access to all the citizens at no cost. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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