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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: It is better to relax by watching a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise. v.1

: It is better to relax by watching a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise. v. 1
It is no doubt true that the majority of people would like to be happy in their lives. While the personal nature of satisfaction makes it difficult to describe, there do seem to be some common needs that we all share with regard to experiencing or achieving merriment. Contentment is difficult to define because it means something different to each individual. Nobody can fully understand or experience another person’s feelings, and we all have our own particular passions from which we take pleasure. Some people, for example, derive a sense of satisfaction from earning money or achieving success, whereas for others, health and family are much more important. At the same time, a range of other feelings, from excitement to peacefulness, may be associated with the idea of happiness, and the same person may therefore feel happy in a variety of different ways. Although it seems almost impossible to give a precise definition of happiness, most people would agree that there are some basic preconditions to achieving it. Firstly, it is hard for a person to be happy if he or she does not have a safe place to live and enough food to eat. Our basic survival needs must surely be met before we can lead a pleasant life. Secondly, the greatest joy in life is usually found in shared experiences with family and friends, and it is rare to find a person who is content to live in complete isolation. Other key factors could be individual freedom and a sense of purpose in life. In conclusion, happiness is difficult to define because it is particular to each individual, but I believe that our basic needs for shelter, food and company need to be fulfilled before we can experience it.
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people
would like to be happy in their
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lives
. While the personal nature of satisfaction
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makes
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describe
, there do seem to be
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some
common
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needs
that we all share with regard to experiencing or achieving merriment.

Contentment is difficult to define
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because
it means something
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different
to each individual. Nobody can
fully
understand or experience another
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person’s
feelings, and we all have our
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own
particular passions from which we take pleasure.
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Some
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people
,
for example
, derive a sense of satisfaction from earning money or achieving success, whereas for others, health and family are much more
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important
. At the same time, a range of other feelings, from excitement to peacefulness, may
be associated
with the
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idea
of happiness, and the same
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person
may
therefore
feel happy in a variety of
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different
ways.

Although it seems almost impossible to give a precise definition of happiness, most
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people
would
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that there are
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basic preconditions to achieving it.
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, it is
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hard
for a
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person
to be happy if he or she does not have a safe place to
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live
and
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enough
food to eat. Our basic survival
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needs
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must
surely
be met
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before
we can lead a pleasant life.
Secondly
, the greatest joy in life is
usually
found in shared experiences with family and friends, and it is rare to find a
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person
who is content to
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live
in complete isolation. Other key factors could be individual freedom and a sense of purpose in life.

In conclusion
, happiness is difficult to define
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because
it is particular to each individual,
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but
I believe that our basic
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needs
for shelter, food and
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company
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need
to
be fulfilled
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before
we can experience it.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay : It is better to relax by watching a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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