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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: In 20 years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today. v.2

: In 20 years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today. v. 2
Humble car produced for faster transportation by Henry Ford has today become of the major form of transportation. In 20 years, the technology used to make cars is going to get better and number of cars should increase. Government has spent huge amount to develop roads and highway transit systems. Cars have an excellent infrastructure in place. They are used as a major transport vehicle. It provides a medium to travel from one place to another and is useful for small family and single people. With the growing population and good infrastructure it' s number is sure to increase. People prefer to travel by their own car as it gives them the comfort of travelling without waiting for buses. Public transport is not dependable, for example when travelling late at night. Thus people always prefer to take their car. They even rent cars when travelling to another cities, simply for this ease of movement. In some places public transport may also not be reliable or frequent enough during business hours. Like remote places and smaller cities. It is not viable for the government to maintain public transport systems in such places. This is genuine difference between public transport and having a personal vehicle. It is unlikely to change in the future thus cars will always be in demand. The income of people in developing nations is increasing, with higher GDP for countries and increasing per capita income. In the next 20 years if this trend continues, people will get richer and start investing in comfortable traveling options like a personal car. Within the next 20 years cars may also evolve to run on solar power. Thus cars will be more in demand due to technological improvements. Currently the government is trying to encourage people to use public transport and car pooling to reduce pollution and other ill effects of car emission. It is possible that in the future we use clean emission cars due to the aforementioned grounds. Research on Self driving cars is also being undertaken by several companies. If that becomes a reality the number of cars will increase as well. Today the old people and differently-abled people may not be able to drive cars. A self driving will be beneficial for them as well. Improvement in technology, better economies and the inherent ease and flexibility of travelling by car is definitely a pointer that the future of cars is quite safe. Their numbers will definitely not decrease if not increase.
Humble
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car
produced for faster transportation by Henry Ford has
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today
become of the major form of transportation. In 20 years, the technology
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used
to
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make
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cars
is going to
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get
better and
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number
of
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cars
should increase.

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Government
has spent huge amount to develop roads and highway transit systems.
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Cars
have an excellent infrastructure in
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place
. They are
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used
as a major
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transport
vehicle. It provides a medium to travel from one
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place
to another and is useful for
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small
family and single
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people
. With the growing population and
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good
infrastructure
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number
is sure to increase.

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People
prefer to travel by their
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own
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car
as it gives them the comfort of
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travelling
without waiting for buses.
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Public
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transport
is not dependable,
for example
when
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travelling
late at night.
Thus
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people
always prefer to take their
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car
. They even rent
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cars
when
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travelling
to another cities,
simply
for this
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ease
of movement. In
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some
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places
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public
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transport
may
also
not be reliable or frequent
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enough
during business hours. Like remote
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places
and smaller cities. It is not viable for the
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government
to maintain
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public
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transport
systems in such
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places
. This is genuine difference between
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public
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transport
and having a personal vehicle. It is unlikely to
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change
in the future
thus
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cars
will always be in demand.

The income of
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people
in developing nations is increasing, with higher GDP for countries and increasing per capita income. In the
next
20 years if this trend continues,
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people
will
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get
richer and
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start
investing in comfortable traveling options like a personal car.

Within the
next
20 years
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cars
may
also
evolve to run on solar power.
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Thus
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cars
will be more in demand due to technological improvements.
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Currently
the
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government
is trying to encourage
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people
to
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use
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public
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transport
and
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car
pooling to
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reduce
pollution and other ill effects of
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car
emission. It is possible that in the future we
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use
clean emission
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cars
due to the aforementioned grounds. Research on Self driving
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cars
is
also
being undertaken by several
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companies
. If that becomes a reality the
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number
of
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cars
will increase
as well
.
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Today
the
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old
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people
and
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differently-abled
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people
may not be able to drive
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cars
. A
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self driving
will be beneficial for them
as well
.

Improvement in technology, better economies and the inherent
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ease
and flexibility of
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travelling
by
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car
is definitely a pointer that the future of
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cars
is quite safe. Their
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numbers
will definitely not decrease if not increase.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
49Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay : In 20 years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today. v. 2

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
413 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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