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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: borrowing money from a friend can harm or damage the friendship? v.2

: borrowing money from a friend can harm or damage the friendship? v. 2
Friends play an important role on people' s lives. It has been said that after families, friends are the people who are more important on our lives. In today' s societies, there are many people who only valued their friends based on the benefits that he or she might get from this relationship. Each person will provide a different concept regarding this topic, and each opinion will rely in some factors such as educational, social, economical and even familiar backgrounds. As far as I' m concern, there is nothing bad when one asks a friend for some money. To support my point of view, I will develop some arguments in the next paragraphs. In the first place, people consider friends like families. After spending many years interacting with a friend, one become very familiar with him or her, and even consider this person like a family member. With this plight in mind, let' s make a breaf assesment about a situtation that occured with me a few years ago. As we should know, college requires an exagerate investment of money. Therefore, in countries such as Dominican Republic where people don' t get educational loans, some times students faced economical problems and because of that the fastest solution is to ask friends for money. This was the case with me, I spent all my money in a research project and my best friend lent me 50 box. Thanks to him, I could finish my week until my parents send me some cash. Another aspect important that should be addressed in this explanation is that friends are always able to help. If someone' s friend has a dificult situation, then one also become worry for that. Hence, money is a minor factor that should not be considered when a real friendship exists. Even though there are people that before making a friend assess the economical status of that person, it seems to me that they are not sincere. In addition, a good friendship cannot be bough with money. For instance, I remember one day that, I was feeling really sick, since my parents lived very far, my friend was the only one who helped, and took me to the hospital. If would not have had because my friend helped me, no one would have took me to the hospital. To sum up, for the reasons stated above, I consider that there is nothing bad when one borrows money from friends because one might have an emergency and friends are also able to help. Also, money is not always the most important.
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play an
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lives
. It has
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that after families,
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friends
are the
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people
who are more
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important
on our
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lives
. In
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today&
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many
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people
who
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only
valued their
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friends
based on the benefits that he or she might
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get
from this relationship. Each person will provide a
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different
concept regarding this topic, and each opinion will
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rely
in
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some
factors such as educational, social, economical and even familiar backgrounds. As far as
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I&
#039; m concern, there is nothing
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bad
when one asks a
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friend
for
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some
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money
. To support my point of view, I will develop
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some
arguments in the
next
paragraphs.

In the
first
place,
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people
consider
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friends
like families. After spending
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many
years interacting with a
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friend
, one become
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very
familiar with him or her, and even consider this person like a family member. With this plight in mind,
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let&
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make
a
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breaf
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assesment
about a
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situtation
that
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occured
with me a few years ago. As we should know, college requires an
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exagerate
investment of
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money
.
Therefore
, in countries such
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as Dominican Republic
where
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people
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don&
#039; t
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get
educational loans,
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some
times students faced
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economical
problems and
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because
of that the fastest solution is to ask
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friends
for
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money
. This was the case with me, I spent all my
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money
in a research project and my best
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friend
lent me 50 box. Thanks to him, I could finish my week until my parents
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send
me
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some
cash.

Another aspect
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important
that should
be addressed
in this explanation is that
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friends
are always able to
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help
. If
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someone&
#039; s
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friend
has a
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dificult
situation, then one
also
become
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worry for
that.
Hence
,
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money
is a minor factor that should not
be considered
when a real friendship exists.
Even though
there are
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people
that
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before
making a
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friend
assess the
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economical
status of that person, it seems to me that they are not sincere.

In addition
, a
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good
friendship cannot be bough with
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money
.
For instance
, I remember one day that, I was feeling
really
sick, since my parents
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lived
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very
far, my
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friend
was the
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only
one who
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helped
, and took me to the hospital. If
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would not have
had
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because
my
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friend
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helped
me, no one would have
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took
me to the hospital.

To sum up, for the reasons stated above, I consider that there is nothing
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bad
when one borrows
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money
from
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friends
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because
one might have an emergency and
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friends
are
also
able to
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help
.
Also
,
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money
is not always the most
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important
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19Mistakes

IELTS essay : borrowing money from a friend can harm or damage the friendship? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
429 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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