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do you agree or disagree with the following statement? it is important for student to understand ideas and concepts than it is for them to learn facts. v.870

it is important for student to understand ideas and concepts than it is for them to learn facts. v. 870
There are a lot of theory about learning. Some of them highlight the fact and insist that students should focus on the real fact and study every case that would be observable. others believe that because the aim of studying is knowing about fact, students should learn concepts and ideas that relate to phenomenon. in this writer' s view, understanding ideas and concepts are more important that studying facts. this essay tries to illustrate this opinion by two important reasons. first, since old time, people had amazed when they see wonderful phenomenon in the nature. in prehistoric time, human tried to use superstitious or super natural power to describe cause of some fact. developing in the technology and human ability to think, allows them to bring concept and idea for interpreting many facts that occurs in nature. for instance, Isaac Newton saw falling apple toward earth. he consider about this fact. through accurate examination and using others research he extract the Gravity principle. this law explain many fact that occur in the world. as you see, concept and idea could demonstrate in which way specific occurrence could be observed. second, the world has unchangeable rules and every fact in world follow those. in other word, ideas and concept are the language that nature talk with human. if mankind could discover rules, he will able to know more about world. facts and phenomenon are the clues for reaching to concepts. curious mind elicits idea by noticing relation between facts. expanding those idea, will show clear view about world. scientists use concepts to predict the facts and change them if be possible. for example, by using these concept many disaster such as flooded or many epidemic disease could be predictable and many people life will be saved. as you see, finite concept and idea, tell why, when and how infinite facts happen. with regards to these reasons which mention above, whether for interpreting fact or having clear image from the world it is better, studying on concepts and idea seems more essential.
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a lot of
theory about learning.
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of them highlight the
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fact
and insist that students should focus on the real
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fact
and study every case that would be observable.
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others
believe that
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because
the aim of studying
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is knowing
about
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fact
, students should learn
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concepts
and
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ideas
that relate to phenomenon.
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in
this
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writer&
#039; s view, understanding
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ideas
and
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concepts
are more
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important
that studying facts.
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this
essay tries to illustrate this opinion by two
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important
reasons.

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first
, since
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old
time,
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people
had amazed when they
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see
wonderful phenomenon in the nature.
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in
prehistoric time, human tried to
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use
superstitious or super natural power to
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describe
cause of
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some
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fact
.
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developing
in the technology and human ability to
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think
,
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allows
them to bring
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concept
and
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idea
for interpreting
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many
facts that occurs in nature.
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for
instance, Isaac Newton
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saw
falling apple toward earth.
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he
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consider about this
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fact
.
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through
accurate examination and using others research he
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extract
the Gravity principle.
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this
law
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explain
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many
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fact
that occur in the
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world
.
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as
you
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see
,
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concept
and
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idea
could demonstrate in which way specific occurrence could
be observed
.

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second
, the
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world
has unchangeable
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rules
and every
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fact
in
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world
follow those.
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in
other word,
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ideas
and
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concept
are the language that nature talk with human.
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if
mankind could discover
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rules
, he
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will able
to know more about
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world
.
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facts
and phenomenon are the clues for reaching to
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concepts
.
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curious
mind elicits
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idea
by noticing relation between facts.
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expanding
those
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idea
, will
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show
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clear
view about
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world
.
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scientists
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use
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concepts
to predict the facts and
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change
them if be possible.
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for
example, by using these
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concept
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many disaster
such as flooded or
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many
epidemic disease could be predictable and
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many
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people
life will
be saved
.

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as
you
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see
, finite
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concept
and
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idea
,
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tell
why, when and how infinite facts happen.
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with regards to
these reasons which mention above, whether for interpreting
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fact
or having
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clear
image from the
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world
it is better, studying on
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concepts
and
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idea
seems more essential.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
31Mistakes

IELTS essay it is important for student to understand ideas and concepts than it is for them to learn facts. v. 870

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
340 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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