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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Modern agriculturemethods damage the environment, but providing food for the growingpopulation around the world is more important than protecting theenvironment. v.652

Modern agriculturemethods damage the environment, but providing food for the growingpopulation around the world is more important than protecting theenvironment. v. 652
As a matter of fact, people have always tried to find new ways to improve the agriculture, but sometimes they are not successful. As everybody knows, modern methods have some negative effects on lands and air. Many people believe that producers should stop these new methods and some people think otherwise. In my view, I strongly believe that surviving people is the most important thing in the world. Although new methods in agriculture has some disadvantages, many people can survive with the benefit of that. First and foremost, undoubtedly, technology are improving during the time. Scientist are trying to find new ways to reduce harmful effects of those methods. They have significant improve during last decade. Additionally, researchers are trying to find new methods to remove the negative effects on environment. On the other hand, people are aware of these bad influence. Consequently, they are trying to support researchers and try to do not waste foods. Researchers would be able to fix all environmental issues by new technologies in the future. In addition, people need to live with eating foods. They have to survive to fix the problem. Furthermore, every person is trying to keep the earth to provide a better place for human' s life. Obviously, world is not only for the people in this century, but also is for humans in the future, but we can not skip these human' s life by paying attention to the earth. People have to preserve world and human together. They should create a balance in this issue. Last but not least, although agricultural activities have a few bad effects on the environment such as air, forests, planets and marine, these influence are not that much huge. As an illustration, farmers add some hormones to the chickens food, but these animals will destroy hormones after they do not eat them for one week. Obviously, hormones are not good for human' s health, but it will be remove really quick. To sum up, scientist and people are trying to fix agriculture methods as soon as possible. Also, technology will help them to remove bad effects of nature. These factors will fix damages and prepare a pleasant condition for both humans and nature in the world.
As a matter of fact,
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people
have always tried to find
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new
ways to
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improve
the agriculture,
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but
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sometimes
they are not successful. As everybody knows, modern
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methods
have
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some
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negative
effects on lands and air.
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people
believe that producers should
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stop
these
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new
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methods
and
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some
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people
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think
otherwise
. In my view, I
strongly
believe that surviving
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people
is the most
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important
thing in the
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world
. Although
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new
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methods
in agriculture has
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some
disadvantages,
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many
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people
can survive with the benefit of that.

First
and foremost,
undoubtedly
, technology are improving during the time. Scientist are
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trying
to find
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new
ways to
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reduce
harmful effects of those
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methods
. They have significant
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improve
during last decade.
Additionally
, researchers are
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trying
to find
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new
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methods
to remove the
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negative
effects on environment.
On the other hand
,
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people
are aware of these
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bad
influence.
Consequently
, they are
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trying
to support researchers and try to do not waste foods. Researchers would be able to
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fix
all environmental issues by
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new
technologies in the future.

In addition
,
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people
need to
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live
with eating foods. They
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have to
survive to
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fix
the problem.
Furthermore
, every person is
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trying
to
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keep
the earth to provide a better place for
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human&
#039; s life.
Obviously
,
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world
is not
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only
for the
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people
in this century,
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but
also
is for
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humans
in the future,
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but
we can not skip these
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human&
#039; s life by paying attention to the earth.
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People
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have to
preserve
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world
and
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human
together. They should create a balance in this issue.

Last
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not least, although agricultural activities have a few
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bad
effects on the environment such as air, forests, planets and marine,
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these influence
are not that much huge. As an illustration, farmers
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add
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some
hormones to the
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chickens
food,
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but
these animals will
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destroy
hormones after they do not eat them for one week.
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, hormones are not
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good
for
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human&
#039; s health,
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but
it will be
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remove
really
quick.

To sum up, scientist and
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people
are
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trying
to
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fix
agriculture
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methods
as
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soon
as possible.
Also
, technology will
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help
them to remove
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bad
effects of nature. These factors will
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fix
damages and prepare a pleasant condition for both
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humans
and nature in the
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world
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Modern agriculturemethods damage the environment, but providing food for the growingpopulation around the world is more important than protecting theenvironment. v. 652

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
372 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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