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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Modern life is easier than life in the past. Use specific details and examples to support your answer. v.63

Modern life is easier than life in the past. Use specific details and examples to support your answer. v. 63
Nowadays, the importance of libraries is decreasing. People are more lean towards electronic books and online sources. However, the public libraries also remain in several areas, it is still important to many locals. But, some group of people also thinks that they are no longer important to people. In this essay, I will discuss both points of views and give my opinions. First of all, I personally think that the public libraries are still important to everybody and not only local people in the areas. The reason why I think the local libraries are still important is because there are people who do not have an opportunity or an access to the online books or do not have an electronic devices such as older people who do not know how to use an online newspaper, poor people or homeless people who have not yet received helps and supports from others. Secondly, I think it is necessary to have a public library because they offer educational resources to everyone. They will have full access to everything in the libraries whether it is a video, CDs and audio books. Moreover, it will also boost the local economy because people will be able to work in the local libraries and use the technology there to find the jobs. On the other hands, due to the rising of computers, the majority of people have their own devices that have an access to the online resources such as Google, Kindle, Twitter and Facebook. It is possible to mention that the public libraries will no longer available in the future. Internet and electronic devices have changed the world so much and it impacts the well-being of public libraries. People will use more online resources to look up for the information that they are interested. It is more convenient for an individual to search for everything online at home rather than come to the local libraries. Even though, the technology will change people's lifestyles, but they cannot refuse that the local libraries are still necessary for some groups of people, especially people who do not have a chance to read books online. Though, technology will have an impact to the local libraries, but it cannot replace the entire libraries so I personally think that the local libraries will still exist in the future, but it will not as important as it was in the past. To conclude, the necessity of local libraries has decreased dramatically in the past decades. This is due to the rising and improving technology that influence a lot of people in a large scale. However, the online sources cannot fully replace the local libraries because of several reasons that I have mentioned earlier.
Nowadays, the importance of libraries is decreasing.
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People
are more lean towards electronic
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books
and
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online
sources.
However
, the
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public
libraries
also
remain in several areas, it is
still
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important
to
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many
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locals
.
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,
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some
group of
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people
also
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thinks
that they are no longer
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important
to
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people
. In this essay, I will discuss both points of views and give my opinions.

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First of all
, I
personally
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think
that the
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public
libraries are
still
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important
to everybody and not
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only
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local
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people
in the areas. The reason why I
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think
the
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local
libraries are
still
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important
is
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because
there are
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people
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who
do not have an opportunity or
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an access
to the
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online
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books
or do not have an electronic
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devices
such as older
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people
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who
do not know how to
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use
an
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online
newspaper, poor
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people
or homeless
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people
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who
have not
yet
received
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helps
and supports from others.
Secondly
, I
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think
it is necessary to have a
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public
library
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because
they offer educational resources to everyone. They will have full access to everything in the libraries whether it is a video, CDs and audio
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books
.
Moreover
, it will
also
boost the
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local
economy
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because
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people
will be able to work in the
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local
libraries and
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use
the
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technology
there to find the jobs.

On the other hands, due to the rising of computers, the majority of
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people
have their
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own
devices that have
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an access
to the
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online
resources such as Google, Kindle, Twitter and Facebook. It is possible to mention that the
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public
libraries will no longer available in the future. Internet and electronic devices have
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changed
the world
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so
much and it impacts the well-being of
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public
libraries.
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People
will
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use
more
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online
resources to look up for the information that they
are interested
. It is more convenient for an individual to search for everything
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online
at home
rather
than
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come
to the
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local
libraries.

Even though
, the
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technology
will
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change
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people
's lifestyles,
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but
they cannot refuse that the
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local
libraries are
still
necessary for
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some
groups of
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people
,
especially
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people
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who
do not have a chance to read
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books
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online
. Though,
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technology
will have an impact to the
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local
libraries,
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but
it cannot replace the entire libraries
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so
I
personally
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think
that the
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local
libraries will
still
exist in the future,
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but
it will not as
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important
as it was in the past.

To conclude
, the necessity of
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local
libraries has decreased
dramatically
in the past decades. This is due to the rising and improving
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technology
that influence
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a lot of
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people
in a large scale.
However
, the
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online
sources cannot
fully
replace the
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local
libraries
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of several reasons that I have mentioned earlier.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
Language shapes the way we think, and determines what we can think about.
Benjamin Lee Whorf

IELTS essay Modern life is easier than life in the past. Use specific details and examples to support your answer. v. 63

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
450 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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