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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to be well-informed, a person must get information from many different news resources. v.614

In order to be well-informed, a person must get information from many different news resources. v. 614
I personally disagree that a person must get information from different news resources. By watching television, people can be aware about the events that are related to their own countries while by listening to the radio they can develop the scope of news resources. These days, thanks to advent of internet, the most proportion of people with different age group can access to wide variety of news resources of all over the world. So people should take the trust of news into account and pay utmost attention to the resources that they select in order to keep themselves up to date. Television and radio are more reliable tools with limited resources in comparison with internet which is like the ocean of news and information. Some persons distribute false news on the internet and abuse from the senses and reactions of other people. Some groups who try to attract more people to purchase certain products and exaggerate specific news that is related to special areas of the world in order to invite more people to buy the goods. For example, advertising special merchandise which is made by African people according to helping poor people and making a significant contribution in solving their economical problems. Moreover, some others try to deceive people by distributing fake news and influence on their behavior without rendering reliable evidence. For instance, some researchers advertise about the advantages of using herbal teas in order to decrease the rate of different kinds of cancers. By distributing this news, the consuming of herbal teas increases while by passing years other researchers refute this claim. In addition, some political and economical news that are broadcasted from unknown resources might have had negative effect on society. It is more likely that the root of domestic wars in different countries is related to distributing false news from anonymous resources. Some groups abuse from these kinds of news and make stressful situations for both governments and public which will eventually lead to increasing the rate of inflation and political crimes. In conclusion, I believe that people should take the trust of news resources into consideration and choose special resources that are reliable. In some cases, gathering information from a wide variety of resources increase the probability of error. It is clear that by having different news resources that enforce themselves or make them weak, people run into problem and they would not be able to be well- informed about certain issues.
I
personally
disagree that a person
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must
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get
information from
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different
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news
resources. By watching television,
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people
can be aware about the
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events
that
are related
to their
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own
countries while by listening to the radio they can develop the scope of
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news
resources. These days, thanks to advent of internet, the most proportion of
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people
with
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different
age group can access to wide variety of
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news
resources of all over the world.
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So
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people
should take the trust of
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news
into account and pay utmost attention to the resources that they select in order to
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keep
themselves up to date. Television and radio are more reliable tools with limited resources
in comparison
with internet which is like the ocean of
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news
and information.

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Some
persons distribute false
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news
on the internet and abuse from the senses and reactions of other
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people
.
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Some
groups who try to attract more
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people
to
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purchase
certain products and exaggerate specific
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news
that
is related
to special areas of the world in order to invite more
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people
to
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buy
the
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goods
.
For example
, advertising special merchandise which
is made
by African
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people
according to helping poor
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people
and making a significant contribution in solving their
Did you mean "economic" (=connected with economy)?
economical
problems.

Moreover
,
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some
others try to deceive
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people
by distributing fake
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news
and influence on their behavior without rendering reliable evidence.
For instance
,
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some
researchers advertise about the advantages of using herbal teas in order to decrease the rate of
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different
kinds of cancers. By distributing this
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news
, the consuming of herbal teas increases while by passing years other researchers refute this claim.

In addition
,
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some
political and economical
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news
that
are broadcasted
from unknown resources might have had
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negative
effect on society. It is more likely that the root of domestic wars in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
different
countries
is related
to distributing false
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
from anonymous resources.
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Some
groups abuse from these kinds of
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news
and
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make
stressful situations for both
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governments
and public which will
eventually
lead to increasing the rate of inflation and political crimes.

In conclusion
, I believe that
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people
should take the trust of
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news
resources into consideration and choose special resources that are reliable. In
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
cases, gathering information from a wide variety of resources increase the probability of error. It is
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clear
that by having
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different
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news
resources that enforce themselves or
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make
them weak,
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people
run into
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problem and
they would not be able to be well- informed about certain issues.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay In order to be well-informed, a person must get information from many different news resources. v. 614

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
408 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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