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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One should never judge a person by its external appearance. Use specific details and reasons to support your answer. v.6

One should never judge a person by its external appearance. Use specific details and reasons to support your answer. v. 6
“Beauty lies within the person and not outside” is a well-known phrase. It has a deeper meaning that need understanding from a broader perspective. Some people if asked would say that they judge a person by his or her external appearance tells a lot about a person. Whereas others believe in judging a person based on his or her internal characteristics. As far as I am concerned, I would place my belief in the latter option and I hold the following reasons in its support. Firstly, it’s important to consider that we scarcely get any idea about a person based on his peripheral appearance. So, it’s almost impossible to comment about a person true nature or character. A person is better known by his character, nature and the deeds he performs. For example, Gandhi ji only wore cotton clothes, which is the cheapest fabric, and looked very ordinary. But he has made a mark in the world by his virtues that he believed in such as non - violence. He is a renowned personality because he fought a war with British to bring India independence in a non- violent way. To quote another example, I have a friend she doesn’t dress very well, looks very shabby. She is not very appealing externally. However, she is the topper of our school the most intelligent girl and has won many accolades. Hence it is quite evident we cannot judge a person based on their external appearance. Secondly, a person should rest more significance to internal beauty rather than external beauty. By knowing someone closely a person can better understand the true nature of a person. A person is better to be judged by their nature because it is a better indicator of a someone’s personality. Lotus is the most beautiful flower in the world but it is born in the puddle. To quote an example, a person who doesn’t possess virtues like honesty, helpfulness, truthfulness is not a man of good moral, despite being endowed with beauty. Hence a person’s character builds his personality and character, not the outside beauty and appearance. In a nutshell, it can be concluded that external appearance is only an indicator of outside beauty. If one truly wants to Judge a person’s character, then he or she should look for the qualities that one possesses.
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person
and not outside” is a well-known phrase. It has a deeper meaning that need understanding from a broader perspective.
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people
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person
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his or her
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external
appearance
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tells
a lot about a
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person
. Whereas others believe in judging a
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person
based on
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his or her
internal characteristics. As far as I
am concerned
, I would place my belief in the latter option and I hold the following reasons in its support.

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, it’s
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get
any
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about a
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person
based on his peripheral appearance.
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, it’s almost impossible to comment about a
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person
true
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nature
or
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character
. A
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person
is
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better
known by his
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,
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and the deeds he performs.
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, Gandhi
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wore cotton clothes, which is the cheapest fabric, and looked
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very
ordinary.
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he has made a mark in the world by his virtues that he believed in such as non
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violence. He is a renowned personality
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because
he fought a war with British to bring India independence in a non- violent way. To quote another example, I have a friend she doesn’t dress
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very
well, looks
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shabby. She is not
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very
appealing
externally
.
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, she is the
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topper
of our school the most intelligent girl and has won
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accolades.
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Hence
it is quite evident we cannot judge a
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person
based on their
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external
appearance.

Secondly
, a
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person
should rest more significance to internal
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beauty
rather
than
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external
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beauty
. By knowing someone
closely
a
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person
can
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better
understand the true
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nature
of a
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person
. A
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is
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better
to
be judged
by their
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nature
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because
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better
indicator of
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’s personality. Lotus is the most
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beautiful
flower in the world
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it
is born
in the puddle. To quote an example, a
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person
who doesn’t possess virtues like honesty, helpfulness, truthfulness is not a
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man
of
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good
moral, despite
being endowed
with
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beauty
.
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Hence
a
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person’s
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character
builds his personality and
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character
, not the outside
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beauty
and appearance.

In a nutshell, it can
be concluded
that
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external
appearance is
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only
an indicator of outside
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beauty
. If one
truly
wants to Judge a
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person’s
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character
, then he or she should look for the qualities that one possesses.
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38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay One should never judge a person by its external appearance. Use specific details and reasons to support your answer. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
388 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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