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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. Although science and technology will continue to improve, the most significant improvement for the quality of people's lives have already taken place. v.470

Although science and technology will continue to improve, the most significant improvement for the quality of people's lives have already taken place. v. 470
The 20th and 21st centuries are characterized by all the momentous changes, which have been made in humans' lives. Perhaps the most important milestone of these two centuries is the changes which have been made in science and technology. There is no doubt that they are improved enormously. Besides, they have become perplexed and intricate. Various points of view which are germane to the matter being discussed brings us to the moot question as to whether the most important development in humans' lives has occurred. However, the popular sentiment to which I vehemently cling is that by the progression of human knowledge, technology and science, quality of people' s lives have developed dramatically than past time. The underlying aim of this essay is to put forward some cogent reasons in the number of issues in this framework. To commence with, it is the incumbent upon the government to increase and improve the quality of people' s lives in any given society. Broadly speaking, human beings need to live in a thrived and flourished society, so, the technology and science would guarantee the well-being of people. As a palpable example, with the advent of sophisticated technology in recent years, people now are enjoying a great internet accessibility and computer use. In fact, computer and the internet are of utmost important qualities that people should have in the society. With these technologies, not only can people keep in contact and communicate with others from the different part of the world but also can socialize and improve their social activities. Also, it is beneficial for students as well, due to the fact that without internet hardly can students keep on their education. To elucidate more on this issue, we are now witnessing that this technology has taken place in vast majorities of societies all around the globe. Another equally salient point in corroborating my stance is the development of public transportation. If we take a minute to ponder over it before the technology takes place, a plethora of people had some trials and tribulations getting to their destination in time and people had to use their own cars. Air pollution, traffic congestions were two significant problems which people had to confront. For instance, myriads of people suffered from toxic materials emitted to the atmosphere and many diseases like bronchial troubles were popular among elderly. It can be deduced from a combination of breadth of coverage and depth of detail that with the development of public transportation, already taken place in many societies, these problems could be solved vigorously without spending a vast sum of money. However, every coin has two sides. Not all qualities took place in the society. In fact, various qualities like education and universities, resolve inflation, recover from the economic recession and so forth are needed to guarantee the welfare of the people. For example, in many societies hardly can people attend high ranked universities due to the paucity of facilities. So, they have to migrate to some abroad universities to continue their education. However, it was a story in a nutshell; actually, there are more reasonable grounds that can lend weight to my personal perspective. In light of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that
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are characterized
by all the momentous
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changes
, which have
been made
in
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humans&
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lives
. Perhaps the most
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important
milestone of these two centuries is the
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changes
which have
been made
in science and
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technology
. There is no doubt that they are
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improved
enormously
.
Besides
, they have become perplexed and intricate. Various points of view which are germane to the matter
being discussed
brings us to the moot question
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as to whether
the most
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important
development in
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humans&
#039;
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lives
has occurred.
However
, the popular sentiment to which I
vehemently
cling is that by the progression of
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human
knowledge,
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technology
and science,
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quality
of
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people&
#039; s
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lives
have developed
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dramatically
than
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past time
. The underlying aim of this essay is to put forward
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some
cogent reasons in the number of issues in this framework.

To commence with, it is the incumbent upon the
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government
to increase and
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improve
the
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quality
of
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people&
#039; s
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lives
in any
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given
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society
.
Broadly
speaking,
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human
beings need to
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live
in a thrived and flourished
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society
,
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so
, the
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technology
and science would guarantee the well-being of
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people
. As a palpable example, with the advent of sophisticated
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technology
in recent years,
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people
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now
are enjoying a great internet accessibility and computer
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use
. In fact, computer and the internet are of utmost
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important
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qualities
that
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people
should have in the
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society
. With these
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technologies
, not
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only
can
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people
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keep
in contact and communicate with others from the
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different
part of the world
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but
also
can socialize and
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improve
their social activities.
Also
, it is beneficial for students
as well
, due to the fact that without internet hardly can students
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keep
on their education. To elucidate more on this issue, we are
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now
witnessing that this
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technology
has taken
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place
in vast majorities of
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societies
all around the globe.

Another
equally
salient point in corroborating my stance is the development of public transportation. If we take a minute to ponder over it
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before
the
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technology
takes
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place
, a plethora of
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people
had
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some
trials and tribulations getting to their destination in time and
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people
had to
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use
their
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own
cars. Air pollution, traffic congestions were two significant problems which
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people
had to confront.
For instance
, myriads of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
suffered from toxic materials emitted to the atmosphere and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
diseases like bronchial troubles were popular among elderly. It can
be deduced
from a combination of breadth of coverage and depth of detail that with the development of public transportation, already taken
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place
in
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many
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societies
, these problems could
be solved
vigorously
without spending a vast sum of money.

However
, every coin has two sides. Not all
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qualities
took
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place
in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
society
. In fact, various
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qualities
like education and universities, resolve inflation, recover from the economic recession and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
forth
are needed
to guarantee the welfare of the
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people
.
For example
, in
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many
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societies
hardly can
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people
attend high ranked universities due to the paucity of facilities.
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So
, they
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have to
migrate to
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some
abroad universities to continue their education.
However
, it was a story in a nutshell; actually, there are more reasonable grounds that can lend weight to my personal perspective.

In light of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that
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One language sets you in a corridor for life. Two languages open every door along the way.
Frank Smith

IELTS essay Although science and technology will continue to improve, the most significant improvement for the quality of people's lives have already taken place. v. 470

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
533 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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