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Do you agree or disagree? in order to be well-information, a person must get information from many different resource. v.191

in order to be well-information, a person must get information from many different resource. v. 191
In the modern age, data and knowledge are important part of students and people life. Also, we have many available citations to collect and find information. I believe that humans must use various source to collect date; therefore, I agree with this proposal. Because of many originator, consuming many source help to have high quality of information. The following paragraphs by containing the main reasons, will substantiate my viewpoint. The main reasons why I believe need divers source for having high rank of information is modern technology. To elaborate my point, we are living in the age which every second the data are updated. we can use many sources such as internet, newspaper, books, broadcast like satellites and many other similar items and containers. Hence, if people who want have high quality of information use different references, they would have sufficient acknowledge and it is promote broad horizon of science. A significant example that strikes my mind is, when I was studding at university as master student, I wanted write paper about Microchannels. Owing to having international paper, I had use several reference. Therefore, I used to cyberspace, books and other source to collect the best information. In addition, I believe that using many sources is essential, so its help to reduce incorrect data. In my opinion use only a few sources not only increase possibility of fake information but also increase worth of data. In the other word, people for having worth paper or information so that needs many sources. A quite clear example would be my own experience. I wrote special paper, when I was student. This paper is so important for me. But I used only some resource, thus, some information from topic were rung, and my paper was rejected. If I had used different sources, it would accept on Chemical Engineering magazine. As a result of this, I was being punished that I had pay some money to the university. To conclude, I generally hold opinion that people should use various resources to collect information. Where I stand from that, having many source not only improve the worth of information but also reluctant fault data.
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and knowledge are
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important
part of students and
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people
life.
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, we have
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many
available citations to
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collect
and find
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information
. I believe that humans
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must
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use
various
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source
to
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collect
date;
therefore
, I
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agree
with this proposal.
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Because
of
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many originator
, consuming
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many
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source
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help
to have high quality of
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information
. The following paragraphs by containing the main reasons, will substantiate my viewpoint.

The main reasons why I believe need divers
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source
for
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having
high rank of
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information
is modern technology. To elaborate my point, we are living in the age which every second the
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data
are updated
.
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we
can
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use
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many
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such as internet, newspaper, books, broadcast like satellites and
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many
other similar items and containers.
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, if
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people
who
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want have
high quality of
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information
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use
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different
references, they would have sufficient acknowledge and it is
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promote
broad horizon of science. A significant example that strikes my mind is, when I was studding at university as master student, I
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wanted write
paper about
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Microchannels
. Owing to
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having
international paper, I had
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use
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several reference
.
Therefore
, I
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used
to cyberspace, books and other
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source
to
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collect
the best information.

In addition
, I believe that using
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many
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sources
is essential,
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so
its
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help
to
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reduce
incorrect
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data
. In my opinion
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use
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only
a few
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sources
not
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only
increase possibility of fake
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information
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but
also
increase worth of
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data
.
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the other word,
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people
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having
worth paper or
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information
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that needs
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. A quite
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clear
example would be my
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important
for me.
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used
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resource,
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,
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some
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from topic
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, and my paper
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. If I had
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used
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different
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sources
, it would accept on Chemical Engineering magazine.
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of this, I was
being punished
that I had pay
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some
money to the university.

To conclude
, I
generally
hold opinion that
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people
should
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use
various resources to
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collect
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information
. Where I stand from that,
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having
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many
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source
not
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only
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improve
the worth of
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information
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but
also
reluctant fault
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data
.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay in order to be well-information, a person must get information from many different resource. v. 191

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
359 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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