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do you agree or disagree? To improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors. v.14

To improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors. v. 14
Friends are an integral part of our life. According to one school of thought, friends that have similar views about different things should be selected while others say, mates that can disagree at times should be chosen. In this essay I would like to discuss both the sides and present my own opinion with relevant examples. On one hand, it is better to have friends that have opinion same as ours as it means that both the friends have same the same kind of thought process and beliefs. This also means that there will be less arguments among friends, which in turn leads to less fights. For instance, if one mate believes that girls should not be allowed to go out all alone at nighttime and another friend agrees or approves it, that means both have the same thinking that girls are weaker and are not able to handle things on their own. On the other hand, when friends are of different opinions, then it might lead to arguments and disagreements, but eventually it will be a healthy one. It will help to improve the scope of one's knowledge and will also help to rectify the faults. For example, if a person believes that usage of computers these days have actually improved the capabilities of people and instead of simply approving the views, the other friend can explain the disadvantages of using computers nowadays, then both of them can understand the pros and cons of using computers. Eventually, it can be concluded that although friends having the same views lead to no arguments or less fights, I personally believe that it is better to have mates of different ideologies that can actually help in improving the way we look and perceive about various things around us. It also helps to increase our knowledge about different topics around the world.
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Friends
are an integral part of our life. According to one school of
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thought
,
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friends
that have similar views about
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different
things should
be selected
while others say, mates that can disagree at times should
be chosen
. In this essay I would like to discuss both the sides and present my
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own
opinion with relevant examples.

On one hand, it is better to have
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friends
that have opinion same as ours as it means that both the
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friends
have same the same kind of
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thought
process and beliefs. This
also
means that there will be
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less
arguments among
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friends
, which in turn leads to
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less
fights.
For instance
, if one mate believes that girls should not be
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allowed
to go out all alone at nighttime and another
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friend
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agrees
or approves it, that means both have the same thinking that girls are weaker and are not able to handle things on their
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own
.

On the other hand
, when
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friends
are of
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different
opinions, then it might lead to arguments and disagreements,
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but
eventually
it will be a healthy one. It will
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help
to
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improve
the scope of one's knowledge and will
also
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help
to rectify the faults.
For example
, if a person believes that usage of computers these days have actually
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improved
the capabilities of
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people
and
instead
of
simply
approving the views, the other
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friend
can
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explain
the disadvantages of using computers nowadays, then both of them can understand the pros and cons of using computers.

Eventually
, it can
be concluded
that although
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friends
having the same views lead to no arguments or
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less
fights, I
personally
believe that it is better to have mates of
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different
ideologies that can actually
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help
in improving the way we look and perceive about various things around us. It
also
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helps
to increase our knowledge about
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different
topics around the world.
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IELTS essay To improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors. v. 14

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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