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do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

These days, it seems that the vast majority of individuals consider penetrating of foreign language at primary school is better that doing this at secondary school. Although there are some valid arguments to the contrary, in this paper I will portray all factors apparently which is supportive for new languages learning. First of all, I believe new languages give a lot of crucial perspectives to children since future these languages will help them at every rough issue. Although there have certain fact that, extra languages make childrens' mentality sharp and salubrious which are so significant for themselves and their life. If parents become willingly for aiding their children at this issue then children are able to boost speedily. Secondly, I would contend that the some people report that adopting new language is waste of the time but despite the fact that some crucial and renowed sources notify that at that time children become more diligent and they used to know new languages easily. So, for innovation and evolving new language is vital obviously. In summary, factors give indiviuals that new languages give children new and appropriate improvement for their future and it stands to reason parents are ought to inspire their children all the time
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language
at primary school is better that doing this at secondary school. Although there are
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valid arguments to the contrary, in this paper I will portray all factors
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new
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languages
learning.

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children
since future these
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' mentality sharp and salubrious which are
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significant for themselves and their life. If parents become
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at this issue then
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children
are able to boost
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.

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, I would contend that the
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IELTS essay do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
204 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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