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Do sports stars get paid too much money? Why or why not?

Do sports stars get paid too much money? Why or why not? q185w
It is believed that sports are seen as social cohesion. And sports strars get paid too much money. The first reason is that their salary frequently does not correspond to their contribution. Many sportsmen have huge incomes, because they play in trendy sports clubs, such as Manchester United or Real Madrid, but in fact, unlike miners and teachers, they do little for economic growth. Another factor is that their wages causes outrages in society. Many employees have the average salary, which is enough to lead a modest life, but when they see how much sportsmen earn, they feel resentment to such enormous injustice.
It
is believed
that sports are
seen
as social cohesion. And sports
strars
get
paid too much money. The
first
reason is that their salary
frequently
does not correspond to their contribution.
Many
sportsmen have huge incomes,
because
they play in trendy sports clubs, such as Manchester United or Real Madrid,
but
in fact, unlike miners and teachers, they do
little
for economic growth. Another factor is that their wages causes outrages in society.
Many
employees have the average salary, which is
enough
to lead a modest life,
but
when they
see
how much sportsmen earn, they feel resentment to such enormous injustice.
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IELTS essay Do sports stars get paid too much money? Why or why not?

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