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Discribe to Making of cherry jam and peoduction line

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the cherry jam has a lot of story production line. first of all, they shake a cherry trees and cherry fell down and transport to the company. Then they wash the cherry and separating foliage. After that, the machine choose the best cherry for making jam. next definitely they use machine for take out of the stone middle of the cherry. Meanwhile in the big cauldron the sugar, lemon juice and water are boiling together add a cherry with out stone and give time to boiling with each other. After that we need a some taster to checking a cherry jam quality, if its good we okay to put the cherry jam into the jam glasses and finally label the mark on the cherry jam glasses, that’s it! .
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cherry jam has
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a lot of story
production line.
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first of all
, they shake a cherry trees and cherry fell down and transport to the
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company
. Then they wash the cherry and separating foliage. After that, the machine choose the best cherry for making jam.
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next
definitely they
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use
machine for take out of the stone middle of the cherry.
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Meanwhile
in the
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big
cauldron the sugar, lemon juice and water are boiling together
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add
a cherry
This word is usually written together. Did you mean "without"?
with out
stone and give time to boiling with each other. After that we need a
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some
taster to checking a cherry jam quality, if its
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good
we okay to put the cherry jam into the jam glasses and
finally
label the mark on the cherry jam glasses, that’s it!
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IELTS essay Discribe to Making of cherry jam and peoduction line

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