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Directors of large companies often receive much bigger salary increases than ordinary workers Employers organisations say that in a global market this is necessary to attract the best management talent What are your views v.1

In this competitive world, people think that the leaders of one company would receiving higher income than their employee is unfair. But, I completely agree that the higher position, the higher salary. First of all, directors of organization is always the person who has responsibility for making an important decision related to company development and operating staff at the right position. . To run the company, directors has a wide and deep perspective in future. The competitive of between many company in market is increasing and directors are under pressure whenever making an decision, which effect directly on company’s benefit. Beside, leader need arrange and distribute work reasonably for all below employees. This will directly effect on work efficiency. In the second hand, leader is the person has a lot of experience and the ability to cope with bad situations while workers just focus and do small tasks. Director has enough wide knowledge to solve all problems which happen anytime. When organizations deal with difficult indoor or outdoor, leaders give best temporary solution to overcome. In contrast, workers are only focus and finished their work and don’t care about company. This is the reason why they receive less salary compare to directors. In short, director deserve a high salary because of amount of work that the face. This is reasonable and very fair. If workers have high capacity, they will also get promotions and high salaries.

In this competitive world, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
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think
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leaders
 of one You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgroupclubcommunityteampartyassociation
company
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receiving
 higher income than their employee is unfair. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
, I completely This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesce
agree
 that the higher position, the higher salary.

Often, this adverbial phrase is redundant. Consider using “first”.First
First of all
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withheadsupervisorproducerexecutiveadministratorplayer
directors
 of organization is always the person who has responsibility for making an This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
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company
 development and operating staff at the right position. Don’t put a space before the full stop..
.
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company
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directors
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in future
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competitive
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many
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company
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directors
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an
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company’s
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Beside
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withheadrulerchiefcommanderdirectormanager
leader
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work
reasonably
 for all below employees. This will directly
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effect
 on You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtaskindustrytrialjobproductionstruggle
work
 efficiency.

In the second hand, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withheadrulerchiefcommanderdirectormanager
leader
 is the person has This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
a lot of
 experience and the ability to cope with This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :evil
bad
 situations while workers This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 focus and do This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
small
 tasks. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withheadsupervisorproducerexecutiveadministratorplayer
Director
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enough
 wide knowledge to solve all problems which happen anytime. When organizations deal with difficult indoor or outdoor, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withheadrulerchiefcommanderdirectormanager
leaders
A determiner is probably missing here: “give the best”.give the best
give best
 temporary solution to overcome. In contrast
, workers are This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 focus and finished their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtaskindustrytrialjobproductionstruggle
work
 and don’t care about You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgroupclubcommunityteampartyassociation
company
. This is the reason why they receive less salary compare to directors.

In short, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withheadsupervisorproducerexecutiveadministratorplayer
director
 deserve a high salary This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 of amount of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtaskindustrytrialjobproductionstruggle
work
 that the face. This is reasonable and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :equitable
fair
. If workers have high capacity, they will also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 promotions and high salaries. 