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Difficulties in Education Summary

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I enrolled at Concordia University in 2019 as an independent and part time student. I have taken few prerequisites courses which were required for an admission to John Molson School of Business. However, as I have never been through Cegep education, the intensity and pace of university level courses were very challenging for me. I didn't reach the minimum grade in both Math208 and 209. Even though I had passed all other prerequisites courses with required grade. After few attempts on improving Math grades, I have been reflecting seriously on the reason of failure. I should have taken advisor's advice. If I toke the preparation course of Math208, , I could have a better result in Math. Secondly, I lacked planning in study and life. Therefore, I take time to plan and reschedule my routine during the Spring. I realized that I should seeking a program which can lead me to work instead of pursuing a higher educational credential. I have been taking English courses at Dawson since March. Now I am learning Excel and Math in other learning platform as well. I believe that I am prepared to continue pursue my studies.
The usual collocation for "enrolled" is "in" (a school) or "for" (a course). Did you mean "I enrolled in" or "I enrolled for"?
I enrolled at
Concordia University in 2019 as an independent and
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
part time
student. I have taken few prerequisites
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
courses
which
were required
for an admission to John
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Molson
School of Business.
However
, as I have never been through
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Cegep
education, the intensity and pace of university level
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
courses
were
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
challenging for me. I didn't reach the minimum grade in both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Math208
and 209.
“Even though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Even though
I had passed all other prerequisites
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
courses
with required grade. After few attempts on improving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Math
grades, I have been reflecting
seriously
on the reason of failure. I should have taken advisor's advice. If I toke the preparation
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Math208
,
Two consecutive commas
,
I could have a better result in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Math
.
Secondly
, I lacked planning in study and life.
Therefore
, I take time to plan and reschedule my routine during the Spring. I realized that I should
The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: "seek"
seeking
a program which can lead me to work
instead
of pursuing a higher educational credential. I have been taking English
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
courses
at Dawson since March.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
I am learning Excel and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Math
in other learning platform
Did you mean "to"?
as
well. I believe that I
am prepared
to
Probably a preposition is missing after 'continue'.
continue pursue
my studies.
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IELTS essay Difficulties in Education Summary

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
193 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
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