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Developments in technology are causing environmental problems

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There is no denying the fact that technological development has had a negative impact on the planet. Everything from the air we breathe to the food we eat is contaminated these days due to the use and abuse of various inventions of technology. For example, motor vehicles pollute the air. Pesticides contaminate the food we eat. Some people believe that the only way to reverse environmental damage caused by technology is to adopt a simple lifestyle. Others insist that technology can undo the damage caused by it. I agree with this view. To start with, the argument that we all should now live a simpler life devoid of technology is impractical. We are so habituated to having technology in our life that it is now impossible to imagine a world without light bulbs, fans, refrigerators or computers. So, even if technology is causing considerable environmental damage it is impossible to convince people that they should stop using it. A better solution is to invest in greener technologies that can mitigate much of the environmental damage already done. Scientists have already started working on them. For example, many trains now run on electricity. They cause much less pollution than diesel engines. Electric cars are another promising technology. It is safe to assume that in 10 or 15 years, they will completely replace cars running on fossil fuels. Likewise, greener energy sources like wind and solar may soon replace conventional energy sources like coal. To conclude, while it is true that technology caused a great deal of damage to the environment, it is also quite capable of finding solutions to the problems it caused. As technology continues to develop, I am sure it will become cleaner and greener. Thus the argument that adopting a simple life is the only way to mitigate environmental damage does not hold much water.
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impact on the planet. Everything from the air we breathe to the food we eat
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these days due to the
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and abuse of various inventions of
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people
believe that the
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damage
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is to adopt a simple lifestyle. Others insist that
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a simpler life devoid of
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is impractical. We are
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in our life that it is
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impossible to imagine a world without light bulbs, fans, refrigerators or computers.
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it is impossible to convince
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that they should
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A better solution is to invest in greener
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technologies
that can mitigate much of the
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environmental
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already done. Scientists have already
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trains
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run on electricity. They cause much less pollution than diesel engines. Electric cars are another promising
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. It is safe to assume that in 10 or 15 years, they will completely replace cars running on fossil fuels.
Likewise
, greener energy sources like wind and solar may
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replace conventional energy sources like coal.

To conclude
, while it is true that
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caused
a great deal of
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. As
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continues to develop, I am sure it will become cleaner and greener.
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does not hold much water.
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IELTS essay Developments in technology are causing environmental problems

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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