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Developments in science and technology have caused environmental problems. Some people think that a simpler way of life will protect the environment, while others believe that science and technology can solve environmental problems. Discuss both views and v.1

Developments in science and technology have caused environmental problems. Some people think that a simpler way of life will protect the environment, while others believe that science and technology can solve environmental problems. 1
Marriage has always been considered as the most responsible act uniting lives of two different persons. Some individuals believe that partners ought to dwell before the official ceremony in order to discover more about the lover and confirm that both are congruent. I believe that in most cases living together before marriage has many advantages and I will explain my point of you in the following essay. Firstly, I am convinced that this phase can prevent discord and divorces in the long run. Couples receive a chance to test their compatibility in day-to-day routine. Certain things definitely can not be revealed during the dating period so that twosome will examine conformity in all possible ways. For instance, seven years ago I suggested to my boyfriend to move at my place to be confident we can stand each others’ patterns and habits. However, this attempt failed after a few months. Therefore, a “trial period” of the cohabitation serves unstable relationships to end rather sooner than later. Moreover, finance related topics are another motive to ponder. During the dating stage the pair usually feels shy regarding discussing any crucial subjects related to money. If the significant others pay all bills in the restaurants it doesn’t prove they will ensure full financial support all along the family life. Based on Russian statistics, a quarter of families’ breakdowns occur due to economic disagreements. Hence, the benefit-sharing stage allows to avoid considerable miscommunication in the future. Taking everything into consideration, before the final decision about the wedding beloved ones should experience communal life, to verify their alliance render them both enhanced.
Marriage has always
been considered
as the most responsible act uniting
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lives
of two
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different
persons.
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Some
individuals believe that partners ought to dwell
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before
the official ceremony in order to discover more about the lover and confirm that both are congruent. I believe that
in most cases
living together
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before
marriage has
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many
advantages and I will
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explain
my point of you in the following essay.

Firstly
, I
am convinced
that this phase can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
discord and divorces in the long run. Couples receive a chance to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
test
their compatibility in day-to-day routine. Certain things definitely can not
be revealed
during the dating period
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that twosome will examine conformity in all possible ways.
For instance
, seven years ago I suggested to my boyfriend to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
at my place to be confident we can stand each
Did you mean "other's"?
others’
patterns and habits.
However
, this attempt failed after a few months.
Therefore
, a “trial period” of the cohabitation serves unstable relationships to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
rather
sooner than later.

Moreover
, finance related topics are another motive to ponder. During the dating stage the pair
usually
feels shy regarding discussing any crucial subjects related to money.
“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
the significant others pay all bills in the restaurants it doesn’t prove they will ensure full financial support all along the family life. Based on Russian statistics, a quarter of families’ breakdowns occur due to economic disagreements.
Hence
, the benefit-sharing stage
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allows
Did you mean "avoiding"? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
to avoid
considerable miscommunication in the future.

Taking everything into consideration,
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before
the final decision about the wedding beloved ones should experience communal life, to verify their alliance render them both enhanced.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Developments in science and technology have caused environmental problems. Some people think that a simpler way of life will protect the environment, while others believe that science and technology can solve environmental problems. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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