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describe your birthday party with your friends and your family

describe your birthday party with your friends and your family kbwW2

I will be waliking on air because I will celebrate party for my birthday. I will invite my friends come with me to have fun and play together. I have invited my old friends but they are busy and I am down in the dump. Anyway, my new friends are come to party and my family is beside me. If we do not come to party, I will spend my time to meet them and we will have many unforgettable and have fun together. By the way, in my birthday party I feel the family is one of the most thing in my life. My parents are very love me and they said: "you deserve to be loved" and i fell my parent"s love for me. I was so happy during the party that everyone"s blessing and the cake was blown. I will not forget this everyone"s memories for me. I am so grateful to my friends and family for giving me a mrmorable birthday party

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waliking
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because
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party
 for my birthday. I will invite my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcolleagueacquaintancebuddyassociatecompanionroommate
friends
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come
 with me to have fun and play together. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 have invited my This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ancientagedmature
old
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friends
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but
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busy and
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party
, I will spend my time to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :attain
meet
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many
 unforgettable and have fun together. By the way, The usual preposition for "birthdays" is "on". Revise: "on my birthday".on my birthday
in my birthday
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party
 I feel the family is one of the most thing in my life. My parents are This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :admireadore
love
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"
you deserve to be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :admiredadored
loved
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i
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parent"s
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love
 for me. I was This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
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party
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everyone"s
 blessing and the cake was blown
. I will not forget this The double quotation mark seems incorrect here.everyone's
everyone"s
 memories for me. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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so
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friends
 and family for giving me a Possible spelling mistake found.memorable
mrmorable
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