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Describe the person in your family who you most admire.

In my family, the influential person with me is my daddy who always give me a sympathetic ear. I really admire my father - he can do everything in various domain of expertise of majors such as mechanic engineer, plumber, welder, electrical engineer and a little bit architect. He is the best men, a role model to follow. He play a vital role in my decision because when I find it hard, I talk about all problem that I face it for him and my papa will direct how to solve the issue or a little advice. My father always have how to deal with every case and encourage me toovercome all difficults in my life.
In my family, the influential person with me is my
In some contexts, this is childish language. Consider alternatives.
daddy
who always give me a sympathetic ear. I
really
admire my father
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
he can do everything in various domain of expertise of majors such as mechanic engineer, plumber, welder, electrical engineer and a
Reduce redundancy by using “little” or “bit”.
little bit
architect. He is the best
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
men
, a role model to follow. He
The pronoun ‘He’ is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: “plays”, “played”.
play
a vital role in my decision
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
when I find it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
, I talk about all problem that I face it for him and my
In some contexts, this is childish language. Consider alternatives.
papa
will direct how to solve the issue or a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
advice. My father always have how to deal with every case and encourage me
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toovercome
all
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difficults
in my life.
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IELTS essay Describe the person in your family who you most admire.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
116 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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