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describe something that make you happy

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My life doesn't really have a lot of interesting things happening but if I have to talk about one thing, I would say the first laptop I bought with my own money was what happy me the most. It was about 3 years ago, when I was a senior student in my university. At that time, I really needed to purchase a new laptop as soon as possible in order to do homework and assignments for my thesis, so I asked a lot of people about which brand I should buy. After considering everything, I decided to buy a laptop from the DELL brand shop. When it comes to how I use this laptop, besides doing homework and assignments, I like watching movies as well as playing games for recreational purposes, which have brought me a sense of fun until now. There are so many reasons why I really love this laptop. Firstly, I bought it for a reasonable price. Unlike other famous laptop brands like ASUS and Lenovo, which usually cost an arm and a leg, this DELL laptop is suitable for people who are not well-off like me. Besides that, when using this laptop, I can ease my mind by doing a range of recreational activities after a long day at school and get away from daily routine. In the future, I would like to keep this laptop as long as possible as I am extremely happy to own it.
My life doesn't
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interesting things happening
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if I
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have to
talk about one thing, I would say the
first
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laptop
I
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bought
with my
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own
money was what happy me the most. It was about 3 years ago, when I was a senior student in my university. At that time, I
really
needed to
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purchase
a new
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laptop
as
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soon
as possible in order to do homework and assignments for my thesis,
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so
I asked
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a lot of
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people
about which brand I should
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buy
. After considering everything, I decided to
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buy
a
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laptop
from the DELL brand shop.

When it
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comes
to how I
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use
this
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laptop
,
besides
doing homework and assignments, I like watching movies
as well
as playing games for recreational purposes, which have brought me a sense of fun until
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now
.

There are
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so
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many
reasons why I
really
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love
this
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laptop
.
Firstly
, I
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bought
it for a reasonable price. Unlike other
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famous
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laptop
brands like ASUS and Lenovo, which
usually
cost an arm and a leg, this DELL
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laptop
is suitable for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who are not well-off like me.
Besides
that, when using this
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laptop
, I can
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ease
my mind by doing a range of recreational activities after a long day at school and
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get
away from daily routine. In the future, I would like to
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keep
this
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laptop
as long as possible as I am
extremely
happy to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
it.

IELTS essay describe something that make you happy

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
242 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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