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Describe one memorable event or experience which provided you with a new outlook on life

Describe one memorable event or experience which provided you with a new outlook on life LqOn6
I remember we didn't come from a wealthy family, and at that time, my classmates spent their parents' money and time on Latest PlayStation or just used to skip their meals and eat at the school canteen at enormous prices every day. In contrast, I didn't have that much pocket money to spend on these hi-fi games. At that time, I used to come home and fight with my parents that; why do others have so much luxury that they come to school in sedans. In contrast, I need to go in these cramped buses every day; why can't you afford to buy me PlayStation? Why do we spend so much just playing these boring board games? I saw something that I can't forget ever: my dad just leaving the room crying. He didn't say anything to me, but we stopped playing board games. My parents came from a very lower-middle-class family. Like all the parents, they wanted the best for me. In middle-class families, the main focus is on quality education, and like every other parent, they may commit mistakes, but their intention is noble. I used to think that whenever I wanted any books or some project materials and even those Oxford encyclopedias, which used to cost a massive amount of money during the 2000s, why did they never refuse me. I can't remember even one instance when my parents refused to lend money to me for educational purposes. When I asked them why they did this, their response stunned me. It was, "You need to study and be independent so that you can take care of yourself because the only thing that will stay with you forever is your education; you can be left without money, but no one can take away your knowledge, your wisdom and if you have your education you can rebuild your life and get up if you ever fail. " I've understood the value of their sacrifices. When the prices of vegetables fluctuated significantly, we resorted to cheaper vegetables instead of taking some money off our education allowance, whereas taking some money off our grocery allowance for education was always an option. A few years back, my father had a job during the day. While he was starting his business, he wasn't confident if it'll take off, so he did both simultaneously for some time. He took a workshop on rent for the night and worked all night. He did this six days a week, whereas, on Sundays, he used to manage his business and took some time off for his family. Later, when he thought his company could feed his family, he quit his job and devoted his entire time towards his business; and we didn't go out much, but we tried to contribute whatever we could. Those activities we did at home made a huge difference towards who I am today. Even though at that time I may haven't understood the value of my parent's sacrifices but now I know that the luxury of living life to your fullest doesn't mean having exotic meals in 5-star restaurants, playing games on an X-Box or watching movies every weekend but stands in spending time together as a family and supporting each other in our ups and downs. Even though I have all the things I dreamt of while I was a child, I possess a laptop, a phone, but now we all are addicted to technology, unlike the earlier days when there was a power cut at night, and we kids used to play hide and seek on the road whereas it's extremely rarely I see kids playing hide and seek or Pithu (seven stones) in which one team tries to hit a stack, and other one tries to catch the ball. If they catch it after it has hit the pile and before it has bounced again, the first team is out. Neither are open areas in abundance now where we used to play since multiplexes or parking spots have taken over that area, nor are kids interested in playing these games. Nowadays, if a group of people are sitting together, usually they are busy on their phones, and no one wants to talk to each other, which breaks my heart. If I could go back in time, I would persuade my parents not to buy my younger version a phone since my timid younger self wouldn't listen.
I remember we didn't
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from a wealthy
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, and at that
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, my classmates spent their parents'
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and
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on Latest PlayStation or
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just
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to skip their meals and eat at the school canteen at enormous prices every day.
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, I didn't have that
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much
pocket
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money
to spend on these hi-fi games. At that
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time
, I
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used
to
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come
home and fight with my
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parents
that; why do others have
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so
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much
luxury that they
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come
to school in sedans.
In contrast
, I need to go in these cramped buses every day; why can't you afford to
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buy
me PlayStation? Why do we spend
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so
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much
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playing
these boring board games? I
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something that I can't forget ever: my dad
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just
leaving the room crying. He didn't say anything to me,
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but
we
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stopped
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playing
board games.

My
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came from a
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very
lower-middle-
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class
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family
. Like all the
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parents
, they wanted the best for me. In middle-
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class
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families
, the main focus is on quality
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education
, and like every
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other
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parent
, they may commit mistakes,
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but
their intention is noble. I
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used
to
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think
that whenever I wanted any books or
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some
project materials and even those Oxford encyclopedias, which
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used
to cost a massive amount of
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money
during the 2000s, why did they never refuse me. I can't remember even one instance when my
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parents
refused to lend
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money
to me for educational purposes. When I asked them why they did this, their response stunned me. It was,
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"
You need to study and be independent
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so
that you can take care of yourself
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because
the
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only
thing that will stay with you forever is your
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education
; you can be
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left
without
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money
,
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but
no one can take away your knowledge, your wisdom and if you have your
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education
you can rebuild your life and
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get
up if you ever fail.
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I've understood the value of their sacrifices. When the prices of vegetables fluctuated
significantly
, we resorted to cheaper vegetables
instead
of taking
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some
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money
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off
our
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education
allowance, whereas taking
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some
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money
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off
our grocery allowance for
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education
was always an option.

A few years back, my father had a job during the day. While he was starting his business, he wasn't confident if it'll take
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off
,
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so
he did both
simultaneously
for
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some
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time
. He took a workshop on rent for the night and worked all night. He did this six days a week, whereas, on Sundays, he
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used
to manage his business and took
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some
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time
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off
for his
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family
. Later, when he
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thought
his
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company
could feed his
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family
, he quit his job and devoted his entire
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time
towards his business; and we didn't go out
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much
,
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but
we tried to contribute whatever we could. Those activities we did at home made a huge difference towards who I am
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today
.

Even though
at that
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I may haven't understood the value of my parent's sacrifices
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but
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now
I know that the luxury of living life to your fullest doesn't mean having exotic meals in 5-star restaurants,
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playing
games on an X-Box or watching movies every weekend
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but
stands in spending
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time
together as a
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family
and supporting each
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other
in our ups and downs.

Even though
I have all the things I dreamt of while I was a child, I possess a laptop, a phone,
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but
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now
we all
are addicted
to technology, unlike the earlier days when there was a power
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cut
at night, and we kids
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used
to play
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hide and seek
on the road whereas it's
extremely
rarely I
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kids
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hide and seek
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Pithu
(seven stones) in which one team tries to hit a stack, and
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one tries to catch the ball. If they catch it after it has hit the pile and
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before
it has bounced again, the
first
team is out. Neither are open areas in abundance
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now
where we
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used
to play since multiplexes or parking spots have taken over that area, nor are kids interested in
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playing
these games.

Nowadays, if a group of
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are sitting together,
usually
they are busy on their phones, and no one wants to talk to each
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, which breaks my heart. If I could go back in
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time
, I would persuade my
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parents
not to
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buy
my younger version a phone since my timid younger self wouldn't listen.
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IELTS essay Describe one memorable event or experience which provided you with a new outlook on life

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