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Describe Iphone 13 which you are given.

Describe Iphone 13 which you are given. 0wmBO
First and foremost, Iphone 13 is so portable and beautiful. Because it is lightweight, I can bring it everywhere if I want. Its design also made an impression on me a lot with the silver cover and an excellent OLED screen which is suitable for watching movies or playing the video game. In addition, the quality of camera and battery life are improved dramatically. I can take a great photo of my family or beautiful landscape.
First
and foremost,
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Iphone
13 is
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so
portable and
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beautiful
.
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Because
it is lightweight, I can bring it everywhere if I want. Its design
also
made an impression on me a lot with the silver cover and an excellent OLED screen which is suitable for watching movies or playing the video game.
In addition
, the quality of camera and battery life are
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improved
dramatically
. I can take a great photo of my family or
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beautiful
landscape.

IELTS essay Describe Iphone 13 which you are given.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
76 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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