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Describe an old object which your family keep for a long time. What the object is  Where it came from  How long it has been in your family  Explain why you family want to keep it

Describe an old object which your family keep for a long time. What the object is Where it came from How long it has been in your family Explain why you family want to keep it MMrOk
Ancestral belongings hold a special place in people’s heart. Here, I would like to tell about an old device in my parents' house. It is a treadle sewing machine which is total different from current electrical ones in the market. My father bought it as a gift to my mother in the early 1980s in Shenzhen. At the moment, it was an expensive and precious gift to my mother. Eventually right now it is still in a good shape, sitting in my parents' house in our hometown which is about about 400 kms far aways from Shenzhen. It has been kept here for the last 30 years. It becomes one of oldest belongs in my mother's house. It was maintained very well by my mother. The device is always covered with a piece of clothe all year round. Nobody will touch it, except my mom. Every year, when my mother travelled back to our hometown for Spring Festival, she always spent half day in dusting it and adding lubricant to it. It still functions properly. My mother has been keeping and maintaining it for the past 30 years. The major reason for this is that it is a gift from dad who passed away 15 years ago. To my mom, the sewing machine is one of tangible gifts from my father and has priceless value. It reminds us the precious memory of my father. The second reason is that my mom used this sewing machine to sew all the clothes for her children in the early days as a newcomer in Shenzhen in early 1980s. It is a symbol of pride for my mother who had been struggling for the first 10 years in Shenzhen. She has become a millionaire from a newcomer with only 50 yuan in her pocket at the moment in early 1980s. I believe that this treadle sewing machine will be passed on from generation to generation in my brother's family. If one day they dump the this sewing machine, I will definitely flight back to China and keep it and even shift to Canada here.
Ancestral belongings hold a special place in
people
’s heart. Here, I would like to
tell
about an
old
 device in my parents'
house
.

It is a treadle sewing
machine
which is total
different
from
current
electrical ones in the market.

My father
bought
it as a gift to my
mother
in the
early
1980s in Shenzhen. At the moment, it was an expensive and precious gift to my mother.

Eventually
right
now
it is
still
in a
good
shape, sitting in my parents'
house
in our hometown which is
about about
400
kms
far
aways
from Shenzhen.

It has been
kept
here for the last 30 years. It becomes one of oldest belongs in my mother's
house
.
It
was maintained
very
well by my
mother
. The device is always covered with a piece of clothe all
year
round. Nobody will touch it, except my mom.

Every
year
, when my
mother
travelled back to our hometown for Spring Festival, she always spent half day in dusting it and adding lubricant to it. It
still
functions
properly
.

My mother has been keeping and maintaining it for the past 30 years. The major reason for this is that it is a gift from dad who passed away 15 years ago. To my mom, the
sewing
machine
is one of tangible gifts from my father and has priceless value. It reminds us the precious memory of my father.

The second reason is that my mom
used
this
sewing
machine
to sew all the clothes for her children in the
early
days as a newcomer in Shenzhen in
early
1980s. It is a symbol of pride for my
mother
who had been struggling for the
first
 10 years in Shenzhen. She has become a millionaire from a newcomer with
only
50 yuan in her pocket at the moment in
early
1980s.

I believe that this treadle
sewing
machine
will
be passed
on from generation to generation in my brother's family. If one day they dump
the this
sewing
machine
, I will definitely flight back to China and
keep
it and even shift to Canada here.
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IELTS essay Describe an old object which your family keep for a long time. What the object is Where it came from How long it has been in your family Explain why you family want to keep it

Essay
  American English
9 paragraphs
333 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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