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Describe an occasion when you played an outdoor game with others.

Describe an occasion when you played an outdoor game with others. PXg8p
I have played a lot of football matches but there is one match which until now i still remember. That was the quaterfinals match when i was in grade 12. Before the match, we thought we would win easily so we hadn't practised any thing and when entering the match, we had a lot of difficulties because the enemy teams had prepared too well so we were unable to approach their goal. Finally we lost, at that time we felt remorseful and it taught we a lesson that we should never look down on our opponents.
I have played
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football
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matches
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there is one
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match
which until
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now
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i
still
remember. That was the
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quaterfinals
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match
when
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i
was in grade 12.
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Before
the
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match
, we
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thought
we would win
easily
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so
we hadn't
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practised
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any thing
and when entering the
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match
, we had
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a lot of
difficulties
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because
the enemy teams had prepared too well
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so
we were unable to approach their goal.
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Finally
we lost, at that time we felt remorseful and it taught we a lesson that we should never look down on our opponents.

IELTS essay Describe an occasion when you played an outdoor game with others.

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