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Describe an occasion when many people were smiling

Describe an occasion when many people were smiling 95l5r
Smiling is really important these days. Unfortunately in today's fast-paced life, we are forgetting the importance of smiling. Actually, a while ago my husband and I were invited to one of my friend's painting exhibition. And there were about 30 people attending there. Although my friend is an artist and has several magnificent and stunning paintings regarding nature, that exhibition was all about funny different occasions that had happened in my friend’s life. There was a wonderful picture with an amazing cat with a plastic mouse in her mouth and my friend was standing in front of it to explain it to others like a famous standup comedy show. It was really funny and my husband and I exchanged a few smiles while listening to my friend and also all people were smiling at that time. Even thinking about it still brings a smile to my face. I think that you know we should smile more now and then, like when we greet someone or thank someone. It really makes someone’s day.
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really
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these days. Unfortunately in
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today
's
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fast
-paced life, we are forgetting the importance of smiling.

Actually, a while ago my husband and I
were invited
to one of my friend's painting exhibition.

And there were about 30
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people
attending there. Although my
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friend
is an artist and has several magnificent and stunning paintings regarding nature, that exhibition was all about
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funny
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different
occasions that had happened in my
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friend’s
life. There was a wonderful picture with an amazing cat with a plastic mouse in her mouth and my
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friend
was standing in front of it to
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explain
it to others like a
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famous
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standup
comedy
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show
. It was
really
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funny
and my husband and I exchanged a few smiles while listening to my
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friend
and
also
all
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people
were smiling at that time.

Even thinking about it
still
brings a smile to my face. I
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think
that you know we should smile more
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now
and
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then
, like when we greet someone or thank someone. It
really
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makes
someone’s day.
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IELTS essay Describe an occasion when many people were smiling

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
172 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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