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Describe an electronic device you want to buy.

Describe an electronic device you want to buy. PkYmJ
I have fascinations about electronic devices - to buy them, own them and use them. Interestingly, among my very personal belongings, the number of electronic devices forms the major part. The need for the latest electronic devices is never-ending, and that is why I often feel to replace my old TV with a new one or want to purchase a new music system when I find it as a new-arrival item in the market. One such electronic device that I would like to purchase is a washing machine. I have a washing machine at home but it is more than 3 years old and I feel the need to buy a new one. The model that I have in mind would require a good amount of money, and I am planning to buy it at the beginning of the next year. It would cost me around 1, 200 USD. Since this is a branded product, the price might vary at the time I would purchase it. The washing machine that I currently have requires some manual works and I am planning to buy a new washing machine that would require very little manual works to have my laundry done. The number of clothes that need washing has increased dramatically over the years, and it has become cumbersome for me to do all those laundry works using the old washing machine that I have. Furthermore, the old washing machine does not have any facility to dry the clothes, and as a result, I have to take the burden to take all the clothes on the roof-top and have them dried out in the sunlight. The rainy season sometimes makes it very difficult, and that’s why I am planning to replace it with a new one that would facilitate me to dry out the clothes as well.
I have fascinations about
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electronic
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devices
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to
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buy
them,
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own
them and
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use
them.
Interestingly
, among my
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very
personal belongings, the number of
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electronic
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devices
forms the major part. The need for the latest
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electronic
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devices
is never-ending, and
that is
why I
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often
feel to replace my
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old
TV with a
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new
one or want to
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purchase
a
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new
music system when I find it as a new-arrival item in the market.

One such
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electronic
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device
that I would like to
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purchase
is a washing
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machine
. I have a washing
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machine
at home
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but
it is more than 3 years
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old
and I feel the need to
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buy
a
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new
one. The model that I have in mind would require a
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good
amount of money, and I am planning to
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buy
it at the beginning of the
next
year. It would cost me around 1, 200 USD. Since this is a branded product, the price might vary at the time I would
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purchase
it.

The washing
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machine
that I
currently
have requires
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some
manual
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works and
I am planning to
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buy
a
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new
washing
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machine
that would require
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very
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little
manual works to have my laundry done. The number of
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clothes
that need washing has increased
dramatically
over the years, and it has become cumbersome for me to do all those laundry works using the
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old
washing
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machine
that I have.

Furthermore
, the
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old
washing
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machine
does not have any facility to dry the
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clothes
, and
as a result
, I
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have to
take the burden to take all the
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clothes
on the roof-top and have them dried out in the sunlight. The rainy season
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sometimes
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makes
it
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very
difficult, and that’s why I am planning to replace it with a
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new
one that would facilitate me to dry out the
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clothes
as well
.
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IELTS essay Describe an electronic device you want to buy.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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