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Describe an ambition of yours

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What is it: Different people have different ambitions. Some want to save up some money to buy a luxury car while others want to travel to a few countries. Well, I also have an ambition and that is to study in the gifted high school in my city When you have it: I had this ambition when I was 13 years old, just after finishing 7th grade. That gifted high school is the dream school for most students in my city and so do I. What you do to achieve it: well, at school, I always pay attention to every lesson and write down important points carefully. Besides the required classes, I attend some private ones to improve my knowledge as well as review what I have learned before. Moreover, at the weekends, I join a few study groups where I can discuss and solve difficult exercises with my friends. And explain why do you have this ambition: Gifted high schools are designated public schools for secondary students to express gifted potentials in natural sciences, social sciences, and/or foreign languages. I have this ambition because I want to study better at a better school in my city. To do that, I have to try my best to get into a gifted high school.
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people
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ambitions
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want to save up
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some
money to
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buy
a luxury car while others want to travel to a few countries. Well, I
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ambition
and
that is
to study in the
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gifted
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high
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school
in my city

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ambition
when I was 13 years
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,
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just
after finishing 7th grade. That
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gifted
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high
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school
is the dream
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school
for most students in my city and
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do I.

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school
, I always pay attention to every lesson and write down
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points
carefully
.
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the required classes, I attend
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some
private ones to
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improve
my knowledge
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as review what I have learned
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, at the weekends, I
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ambition
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Gifted
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high
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schools
are designated
public
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schools
for secondary students to express
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gifted
potentials in natural sciences, social sciences, and/or foreign languages. I have this
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ambition
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because
I want to study better at a better
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school
in my city. To do that, I
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IELTS essay Describe an ambition of yours

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
213 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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