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Describe a time when you were really close to wild animal

Well, I really fond of knowing about the animals. weather, it is domestic or wild animals. Here I would like to talk about a animal that I experienced from so closely, I vividly remember that when, I was visited a zoo with my parents about two years ago, in summer vocation. The name of the animal is elephant. It is very large in size. It has hidden tooth with two tusk. Moreover it has also a long trunk. Elephant can eat vegetables and bananas. they also drink water with their trunk along with this they have a friendly nature, they showering water with each other to play. The guider of the zoo told all about the elephant that they are more powerful than others animals. I like this animal because they look innocent and many people of India worship the elephant as they are symbol of lord Ganesha. It was fascinating experience for me, that I would never forget forever
Well, I
really
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fond
of knowing about the
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animals
.
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weather
, it is domestic or wild
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animals
. Here I would like to talk about
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a
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animal
that I experienced from
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so
closely
, I
vividly
remember that when, I
was visited
a zoo with my parents about two years ago, in summer vocation. The name of the
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animal
is
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elephant
. It is
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very
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large in size
. It has hidden tooth with two
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tusk
.
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Moreover
it has
also
a long trunk.
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Elephant
can eat vegetables and bananas.
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they
also
drink water with their trunk along with this they have a friendly nature,
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they showering
water with each other to play. The guider of the zoo
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told
all about the
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elephant
that they are more powerful than others
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animals
. I like this
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animal
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because
they look innocent and
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many
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people
of India worship the
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elephant
as they are
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symbol
of lord Ganesha. It was fascinating experience for me, that I would never forget
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph.
forever

IELTS essay Describe a time when you were really close to wild animal

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