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Describe a time when you gave advice to others

Describe a time when you gave advice to others bDEDY
I remembered the advice i gave to my friend when i saw this cue card. He is my closest freind. Because, we are friend in young age. His name is Anvar. He is strong than me and he is smart. One day i saw Anvar, he was sad and alone. I told Anvar "Hi Anvar, how are you? ". He told me self problems and asked me for advice. After i know he had problems in own family. He was upset with his parents. Becouse, his parents doesn't bought new car for his birthday party. He told to me "I really want to a new and comfortable car. But, I wanted car is sold out to another person". Then I said to Anvar "if i were you, I will don't upset from my family. Because, his my family is very important to me in my life. They are very precious to me. If you upset to family, once day you will lose own family and you alone. This event very bad and sad". He thinks of my opinions and he had concluded for own. After several days I saw him. He is very happy and pleasant. Because, he was talking to his family, and he told to his family "I don't need new car at now". And he was very happy at the event. He thanked me for help. To conclude, your family very precious for yourself. Save own family.
I remembered the advice
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i
gave to my friend when
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i
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saw
this cue card. He is my closest
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freind
.
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Because
, we are
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friend
in young age. His name is
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Anvar
. He is
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strong
than me and he is smart. One day
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i
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saw
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Anvar
, he was sad and alone. I
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told
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Anvar
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"
Hi
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Anvar
, how are you?
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"
. He
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told
me self problems and asked me for advice.
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After
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i
know he had problems in
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own
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family
. He
was upset
with his parents.
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Becouse
, his parents doesn't
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bought
new
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car
for his birthday party. He
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told
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to me
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"
I
really
want to a new and comfortable
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car
.
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But
, I wanted
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car
is sold
out to another person
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"
. Then I said to
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Anvar
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"
if
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i
were you, I will don't upset from my
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family
.
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Because
, his my
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family
is
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very
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important
to me in my life. They are
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very
precious to me. If you upset to
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family
, once day you will lose
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own
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family
and you alone. This
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event
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very
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bad
and sad
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"
. He
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thinks
of my
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opinions and
he had concluded for
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own
.
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several days I
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saw
him. He is
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very
happy and pleasant.
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Because
, he was talking to his
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family
, and he
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told
to his
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family
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"
I don't need new
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car
at
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now
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"
. And he was
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very
happy at the
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event
. He thanked me for
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help
.
To conclude
, your
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family
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very
precious for yourself. Save
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own
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family
.

IELTS essay Describe a time when you gave advice to others

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
240 words
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