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Describe a time when you experienced a natural disaster or unusual weather event. Explain what happened and how it affected you. v.1

Describe a time when you experienced a natural disaster or unusual weather event. Explain what happened and how it affected you. v. 1
It is thought by some individuals that the reduction in the utmost speed limits on automobile is the most suitable way to ameliorate road safety, others believe there are other alternatives. Although putting boundaries on acceleration will lower road traffic accidents, I believe people should be educated on the utilization of seat belts. It is argued by some individuals that the most reliable way to improve highway protection is by reducing the ultimate speed time on cars. This is because the reduction in the maximum acceleration will greatly drop the rate of casualties. For example, Lagos State government established LASMA, which controls traffic on major highways. This was put in place in order that the commuters maintain the various speed bounds on all roads. Therefore, calamities on the highways decreases when there are boundaries on acceleration. While this view is cogent, I disagree with it. On the other side of the argument are those who believe that there are other choices to being safe on the road; such as educating the commuters on the need to always use seat belts while driving. Take for instance my neighbour, David, who had an accident two months ago, he survived the collision because he had received a lecture on the use of car straps the previous month. If there was no proper education on the dangers of not using seat belts, perhaps, he might have died. So, commuters will adhere strictly to the utilization of automobile bands when properly educated. In conclusion, despite the fact that the reduction in speed limits will abate transportation calamities, I believe a better option will be to properly educate the populace on the use of automobile straps.
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thought
by
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some
individuals that the reduction in the utmost
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speed
limits on automobile is the most suitable way to ameliorate
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road
safety, others
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believe
there are
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other
alternatives. Although putting boundaries on acceleration will lower
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road
traffic accidents, I
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believe
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people
should
be educated
on the utilization of seat belts.

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is argued
by
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some
individuals that the most reliable way to
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improve
highway protection is by reducing the ultimate
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speed
time on cars. This is
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because
the reduction in the maximum acceleration will
greatly
drop the rate of casualties.
For example
, Lagos State
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government
established
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LASMA
, which controls traffic on major highways. This
was put
in place in order that the commuters maintain the various
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speed
bounds on all
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roads
.
Therefore
, calamities on the highways decreases when there are boundaries on acceleration. While this view is cogent, I disagree with it.

On the
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other
side of the argument are those who
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believe
that there are
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other
choices to being safe on the
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road
; such as educating the commuters on the need to always
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use
seat belts while driving. Take
for instance
my
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neighbour
, David, who had an accident two months ago, he survived the collision
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because
he had received a lecture on the
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use
of car straps the previous month. If there was no proper education on the
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dangers
of not using seat belts, perhaps, he might have
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died
.
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So
, commuters will adhere
strictly
to the utilization of automobile bands when
properly
educated.

In conclusion
, despite the fact that the reduction in
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speed
limits will abate transportation calamities, I
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believe
a better option will be to
properly
educate the populace on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of automobile straps.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Describe a time when you experienced a natural disaster or unusual weather event. Explain what happened and how it affected you. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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