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describe A sports star who you admired

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Who the person is My favourite sports person is Leo Messi. He’s a famous football player, and some would say he’s the best football player in the world. Why he / she is famous Despite his health problems, Messi developed into a modern legend. He has won numerous trophies over the course of his career, including five “world footballer of the year” awards – which is a world record. This explains his popularity. What is special about him / her His life story caught my attention just as much as his incredible skills. I admire him because of his triumph over adversity. I think that his inspiring story of perseverance is a lesson for us all. Whether you would like to meet this person. Take a photo and autograph

“Who” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Who
 the person is My Possible spelling mistake. 'favourite' is British English.favorite
favourite
 sports person is Leo Messi. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withboyguyfather
He’s
 a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:well-known
famous
 football player, and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 would say You use this word too often, consider replacing it withboyguyfather
he’s
 the best football player in the world.

Why he / she is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:well-known
famous


Despite his health problems, Messi developed into a modern legend. He has won numerous trophies over the course of his career, including five “world footballer of the year” awards Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.—
–
 which is a world record. This This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :interprets
explains
 his popularity.

What is special about him / her

His life story caught my attention This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 as much as his incredible This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :proficiencies
skills
. I admire him This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 of his triumph over adversity. I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 that his inspiring story of perseverance is a lesson for us all.

“Whether” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Whether
 you would like to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :attain
meet
 this person. Take a photo and Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraphautograph.autograph!autograph?autograph:autograph,autograph;
autograph