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Describe a present you received which was made by hand

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I’m going to tell you about a sweet and romantic period of my life- my first boyfriend! I was 16 at the time and completely smitten (in love). Since neither of us worked at the time, we would always make each other gifts for special occasions, such as anniversaries, birthdays, or the holidays. I’ll tell you about one gift that I’ll never forget. He made me a collage (art made with several cut up pictures) of all the stages of our friendship and relationship. He must have gone to a print shop to print out all these pictures that carefully cut them out and made a tasteful wall collage with them. The special part of the gift was that he formed the letters of our names out of pictures, Anna and Dave. I thought this was a really creative way to celebrate our love. Looking back, this gift is a bit corny (foolish or not tasteful), but at that time I felt completely blown away (really happy and surprised) by it. We had been friends since we were children, so we had a ton of memories together. Furthermore, our relationship was 4 years long! I liked that he was thoughtful enough to put the effort into this kind of gift. Moreover, I felt really emotional looking at the way he told the story of our friendship that turned into love through photos. In conclusion, these sort of acts were the key to my heart as a teen girl!
I’m going to
tell
you about a sweet and romantic period of my life- my
first
boyfriend! I was 16 at the time and completely smitten (in
love
). Since neither of us worked at the time, we would always
make
each other
gifts
for special occasions, such as anniversaries, birthdays, or the holidays. I’ll
tell
you about one
gift
that I’ll never forget.

He made me a collage (art made with several
cut
up pictures) of all the stages of our friendship and relationship. He
must
have gone to a print shop to print out all these pictures that
carefully
cut
them out and made a tasteful wall collage with them. The special part of the
gift
was that he formed the letters of our names out of pictures, Anna and Dave. I
thought
this was a
really
creative way to celebrate our
love
.

Looking back, this
gift
is a bit corny (foolish or not tasteful),
but
at that time I felt completely blown away (
really
happy and surprised) by it. We had been friends since we were children,
so
we had a ton of memories together.
Furthermore
, our relationship was 4 years long! I liked that he was thoughtful
enough
to put the effort into this kind of
gift
.
Moreover
, I felt
really
emotional looking at the way he
told
the story of our friendship that turned into
love
through photos.
In conclusion
,
these sort
of acts
were
the key to my heart as a teen girl!
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IELTS essay Describe a present you received which was made by hand

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
248 words
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