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Describe a place where you like going shopping

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This topic is quite difficult for me to speak about. Maybe because my shopping hobby isn’t like other people’s. Most people like to go shopping in luxurious or well-known places for clothes or shoes, but for me, it is my turn to spend the time shopping for food and household items. And of course, VinMart is the most ideal place to do it. VinMart supermarkets are always located in golden areas as in densely populated neighborhoods, large downtown areas, and VinMart I often come close to An Phu Thinh Center of commerce. Fortunately, it is only 1 kilometer away from where I lived in the dormitory of my high school. It is convenient that I can go whenever I want. VinMart is a supermarket system under VinGroup, Vietnam. Most VinMart supermarkets are large, with a production area of over 10, 000 m2. Such an enormous size and area can be sold inside a supermarket with hundreds of thousands of different kinds of goods: food, spices, appliances, clothing, cosmetics, toys, personal and household items, and so on. . enough to satisfy consumers' buying needs. Most of the time, I go shopping with my roomate. They all have the same shopping interest that I do. They are not keen on buying clothing, they just go window-shopping. They enjoyed eating, fruit, and personal tools. Also, we often raise money to buy household items for our room in the dormintory or to buy a plenty of food to open party for some reasons. I can tell you that this VinMart really makes a lot of impressions for me. First, most goods are good quality and clean origin. Besides, the prices of these are resonable. Second, this place offers me a member card, so my frequent shoppings will build scores on the card and help reduce the price of the order. Last but not least, because I'm too lazy to go out, having a supermarket right near my neighborhood is a wonderful thing for me to go whenever I want.
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my
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hobby isn’t like other
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people
’s. Most
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people
like to go
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shopping
in luxurious or well-known places for clothes or shoes,
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but
for me, it is my turn to spend the time
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shopping
for food and household items. And
of course
,
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VinMart
is the most ideal place to do it.

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VinMart
supermarkets are always located in golden
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areas
as in
densely
populated neighborhoods, large downtown
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areas
, and
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VinMart
I
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often
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come
close to An
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Phu
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Thinh
Center of commerce.
Fortunately
, it is
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only
1 kilometer away from where I
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lived
in the dormitory of my high school. It is convenient that I can go whenever I want.

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VinMart
is a supermarket system under
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VinGroup
, Vietnam. Most
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VinMart
supermarkets are large, with a production
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area
of over 10, 000 m2. Such an enormous size and
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area
can
be sold
inside a supermarket with hundreds of thousands of
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different
kinds of
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goods
: food, spices, appliances, clothing, cosmetics, toys, personal and household items, and
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so
on.
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.
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enough
to satisfy consumers' buying needs.

Most of the time, I go
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shopping
with my
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roomate
. They all have the same
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shopping
interest that I do. They are not keen on buying clothing, they
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just
go window-shopping.
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They
enjoyed eating, fruit, and personal tools.
Also
, we
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often
raise money to
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buy
household items for our room in the
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dormintory
or to
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buy
a
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plenty
of food to open party for
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some
reasons.

I can
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tell
you that this
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VinMart
really
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makes
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a lot of
impressions for me.
First
, most
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goods
are
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good
quality and clean origin.
Besides
, the prices of these are
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resonable
. Second, this place offers me a member card,
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so
my frequent
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shoppings will
build scores on the card and
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help
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reduce
the price of the order. Last
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but
not least,
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because
I'm too lazy to go out, having a supermarket right near my neighborhood is a wonderful thing for me to go whenever I want.
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IELTS essay Describe a place where you like going shopping

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
335 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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