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Describe a piece of art you like. You should say: -What the work of art is? -When you first saw it? -What you know about it? -And explain why you like it? v.3

Describe a piece of art you like. You should say: -What the work of art is? -When you first saw it? -What you know about it? -And explain why you like it? v. 3
While some see an old architectural style as an eyesore, others see it as an embodiment of the era in which it was built. The two juxtaposing views make it difficult for city planners to decide whether or not the building styles should be unified. While many could argue for finding new architectural design as an iconic, there were reasons to allow the building to have a graceful outward same as other buildings in local areas. On the one hand, many businesses prefer using classic style buildings. It gives their business a sense of character and strives away from seeming like a major chain store that traditionally has multiple buildings designed in the same fashion. They enjoy the emotional connection to the building since not only it has been a part of their community for a long duration of time, but also it acts as a reminder of a city’s culture, complexity, and growth. On the other hand, it can be tempting to consider making new architectural styles, but one must consider the intrinsic value of the building. For instance, many building designs tend to be built with glass and steel materials. The buildings are built to different standards, since those materials are able to withstand more than past construction materials. Nevertheless, trends may come and go, but the principles of architectural design are forever. That’s why, regardless of what the style preferences may be, it’s important to learn about these principles, especially about harmony and unity. These principles are used by professional architectural designers to create a sense of cohesion in the space and to take their work to the next level. In conclusion, despite some community members might like the idea of ​​having modern architectural buildings, retaining traditional building styles is also a way to go. Hence the principles of architectural designs can play an important role in city planning for decades to come.
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style
as an eyesore, others
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see
it as an embodiment of the era in which it
was built
. The two juxtaposing views
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make
it difficult for city planners to decide
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whether or not
the
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building
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styles
should
be unified
. While
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many
could argue for finding new architectural
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design
as an iconic, there were reasons to
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allow
the
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building
to have a graceful outward same as other
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buildings
in local areas.

On the
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one
hand,
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many
businesses prefer using classic
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style
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buildings
. It gives their business a sense of character and strives away from seeming like a major chain store that
traditionally
has multiple
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buildings
designed in the same fashion. They enjoy the emotional connection to the
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building
since not
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only
it has been a part of their community for a long duration of time,
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but
also
it acts as a reminder of a city’s culture, complexity, and growth.

On the other hand
, it can be tempting to consider making new architectural
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styles
,
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but
one
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must
consider the intrinsic value of the
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building
.
For instance
,
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many
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building
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designs
tend to
be built
with glass and steel materials. The
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buildings
are built
to
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different
standards, since those materials are able to withstand more than past construction materials.

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,
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come
and go,
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the
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principles
of architectural
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design
are forever. That’s why, regardless of what the
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style
preferences may be, it’s
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important
to learn about these
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principles
,
especially
about harmony and unity. These
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principles
are
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used
by professional architectural designers to create a sense of cohesion in the space and to take their work to the
next
level.

In conclusion
, despite
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some
community members might like the
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idea
of ​​having modern architectural
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buildings
, retaining traditional
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building
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styles
is
also
a way to go.
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Hence
the
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principles
of architectural
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designs
can play an
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important
role in city planning for decades to
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come
.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Describe a piece of art you like. You should say: -What the work of art is? -When you first saw it? -What you know about it? -And explain why you like it? v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
316 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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