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Describe a personal achievement you are proud of

Describe a personal achievement you are proud of DY5Qo
One achievement that makes me really proud is that i get to work with famous vocal coach. Her name is Nguyen Hoang My Ngoc, who trains and teaches for artists singer like. I was over the moon when I received the invitation to participate in event she created because I nurture the dream of becoming a professional singer and even just working with celebrities. While working with her and everyone I have learned more about music knowledges and how to work in an orderly and professional manner. In conclusion that achievement I will never forget and I am very proud of it has motivated me to try harder and harder to be a passionate person.
One achievement that
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proud is that
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i
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to work with
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famous
vocal coach. Her name is Nguyen
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Hoang
My
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Ngoc
, who trains and teaches for artists singer like. I was over the moon when I received the invitation to participate in
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event
she created
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because
I nurture the dream of becoming a professional singer and even
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just
working with celebrities. While working with her and everyone I have learned more about music
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knowledges
and how to work in an orderly and professional manner.
In conclusion
that achievement I will never
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forget and
I am
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proud of it has motivated me to try harder and harder to be a passionate person.

IELTS essay Describe a personal achievement you are proud of

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
115 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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