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Describe a natural talent you want to improve like sports music - What it is? - When you discovered - How you want to improve it - And how you feel about it?

Describe a natural talent you want to improve like sports music - What it is? - When you discovered - How you want to improve it - And how you feel about it? 85ryV
• I think every person in this world has got a talent or two and few are born with many talents. • If I talk about myself, I am not a person of many talents but one talent that I may have a little is in repairing car mechanical parts. • I'm an electronic engineer and after several years of experience in this field, I am a professional and in most industries, I am known for this specialty • But about 10 years ago, one day my father called me and said that his car had broken down again. • My father's car had been in trouble for some time, and my father took it to my cousin, who is a car mechanic, for repairs. • But his efforts to repair the car were temporary, and after a short time, the car engine needed to be repaired again. • That's why my father called me to decide together what can be done to repair the car engine so that it does not break down again. • After a bit of searching on the internet, I was able to find an engine repair guide and told my father not to worry. We open the car engine ourselves and make the necessary repairs. • Of course, we needed some specialized tools, so we bought them and got started. • My brother also came to give us a hand. • It is a difficult thing to do; therefore, we must explore all avenues if we really want it done. • We have to work against the clock to finish the repairing on the same day. • They were both very surprised that I had an eye for mechanical repairs and that I was able to figured it out. • After that, I did a lot of research on car engine repair to know the ropes and my skill improved little by little • And I bought all the specialized equipment for this work • Even now, if someone in the family needs a car to be repaired, they will bring it to the parking my house, where we will solve the problem. • Repairing the car really blew me away. And I get a kick out of this. • It seems that my sons are also interested in this work and they decide to go into it down the road
• I
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a talent or two and few
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many
talents.

• If I talk about myself, I am not a person of
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many
talents
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but
one talent that I may have a
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little
is in repairing
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car
mechanical parts.

• I'm an electronic engineer and after several years of experience in this field, I am a professional and in most industries, I
am known
for this specialty

•
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But
about 10 years ago, one day my
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father
called me and said that his
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car
had broken down again.

• My father's
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car
had been in trouble for
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some
time, and my
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father
took it to my cousin, who is a
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car
mechanic, for repairs.

•
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But
his efforts to
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repair
the
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car
were temporary, and after a short time, the
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car
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engine
needed to
be repaired
again.

• That's why my
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father
called me to decide together what can
be done
to
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repair
the
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car
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engine
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so
that it does not break down again.

• After a bit of searching on the internet, I was able to find an
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engine
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repair
guide and
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told
my
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father
not to worry. We open the
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car
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engine
ourselves and
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make
the necessary repairs.

•
Of course
, we needed
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some
specialized tools,
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so
we
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bought
them and
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got
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started
.

• My brother
also
came to give us a hand.

• It is a difficult thing to do;
therefore
, we
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must
explore all avenues if we
really
want it done.

• We
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have to
work against the clock to finish the repairing on the same day.

• They were both
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very
surprised that I had an eye for mechanical
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repairs
and that I was able to figured it out.

• After that, I did
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a lot of
research on
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car
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engine
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repair
to know the ropes and my
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skill
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improved
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little
by
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little


• And I
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bought
all the specialized equipment for this work

• Even
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now
, if someone in the family needs a
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car
to
be repaired
, they will bring it to the parking my
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house
, where we will solve the problem.

• Repairing the
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car
really
blew me away. And I
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get
a kick out of this.

• It seems that my sons are
also
interested in this
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work and
they decide to go into it down the road
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IELTS essay Describe a natural talent you want to improve like sports music - What it is? - When you discovered - How you want to improve it - And how you feel about it?

Essay
  American English
15 paragraphs
378 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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